A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
The study as mentioned by author says that children living in Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children staying in suburban area of United States. Also, the children in United States receive dental care for more then once in a year whereas people in Himalayan mountain region of Nepal rarely visit dentists. Even after considering the study to be true and valid, it can't be implied that regular dental care as the study neither talks about the climatic differences, water & air quality of United States & Himalayan region of Nepal nor does it talk about the differences in eating habits and type of foods consumed by children in discussed areas.
The Himalayan region of Nepal has fresh natural air and water coming from rivers directly while the United states suburban areas might be polluted. Floride, which I believe is the element if present in water causes tooth decay, causes the teeth to look yellow and other teeth issues. Since, the children in Himalayan region of Nepal consume fresh and natural water without any contamination or pollution from industries, the chances of presence of Floride in water in Nepal are very less compared to presence of Floride in water in suburban area of United States where several industries might be polluting the water, air or surrounding environment.
Moreover, the food habits of children and the type of food consumed by children on daily basis in Himalayan region of Nepal could be better than the food habits and the food children of United States have. In a mountainous region, it's not easier for companies like Dominos or Pizza-Hut to set up their outlets in Himalayan region of Nepal which is way easier to do in suburban reasons in United States. Thus, probability of children consuming such fast-foods in United States suburban areas is pretty higher than for children in Himalayan region of Nepal.
Therefore, with the help of two points mentioned above, it can be easily elucidated that since the conditions and habits for the children of suburban areas of United States and Himalayan region of Nepal widely differ, we can't conclude that dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay. Because of better natural resources, the children in Nepal might not need the dental care as required by children in United States. To clarify, it should be further investigated keeping these points in mind.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 399 350
No. of Characters: 1968 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.469 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.932 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.423 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.965 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.47 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.657 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.18 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 253, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[2]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ted States receive dental care for more then once in a year whereas people in Himala...
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Line 1, column 407, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ring the study to be true and valid, it cant be implied that regular dental care as ...
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Line 1, column 407, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...ring the study to be true and valid, it cant be implied that regular dental care as ...
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Line 5, column 232, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...d States have. In a mountainous region, its not easier for companies like Dominos o...
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Line 8, column 222, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...layan region of Nepal widely differ, we cant conclude that dental care is not helpfu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, whereas, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 399.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03007518797 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4907013593 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461152882206 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.7432396517 57.8364921388 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.25 119.503703932 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.25 23.324526521 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58333333333 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.496345443903 0.218282227539 227% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.223431622381 0.0743258471296 301% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.16514378486 0.0701772020484 235% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.327837644444 0.128457276422 255% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120617505463 0.0628817314937 192% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 14.3799401198 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.49 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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