"Ten years ago, as part of a comprehensive urban renewal program, the city of Transopolis adapted for industrial use a large area of severely substandard housing near the freeway. Subsequently, several factories were constructed there, crime rates in the area declined, and property tax revenues for the entire city increased. To further revitalize the city, we should now take similar action in a declining residential area on the opposite side of the city. Since some houses and apartments in existing nearby neighborhoods are currently unoccupied, alternate housing for those displaced by this action will be readily available."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument claims that Ten years back after an extensive survey the planning department of the city of Transpolis adapted to use the industrial use a large area of severly substandard housing area in Transopolis and converted it into a an industrial zone because of which it claims that the crime rate in that particular area has decreased also the tax revenues have raised to it further claims on executing a similar in plan on the opposite side of the city. The argument makes a number of unwarranted claims regarding the success of industrialization and prediction of similar plan in opposite of the city if not presented with proper evidence the argument falls apart.
Firstly, The argument claims that there were severly substandard housing in the area which is not justified by providing evidence regarding the same maybe there might be people living in housing in large numbers but because of governnment's greed they converted the area into industrial area by forcefully displacing the people living in those area against their wishes. The argument further claims that the crime rates ahve increased in the particular area which is unsound because the population in that particular region has decreased because of displacement of people into other region and crime in the region where people are displaced might have increased so the crime rate is not criteria to measure the success. also argument further claims that the property tax in that area have increased because industrialization which is unjustifiable as the property tax might have increased due to some factors such huge investment in other parts of the city and that might have contributed to increase in property taxes.
Secondly,The argument claims to take similar actions in the other part of the city which is not feasibe as the structure and population distribution of both the places are different the claim that it makes is, The decline in residential area is accounted for reason which is not true because the area might have converted into commericial zone and plays an important part in the economy therefore should not be replaced by industries which might have adverse effect on the economy. also it claims the houses were currently unoccupied maybe survey was taken at the time of holidays when people might have migrated to the their county houses and hence might have given false impression regarding the housing. also the arguments plans to displace the current population of the area which the inhabitants might rebel against as some of the houses contains sentimental values. people might resist the displacement also the proximity to schools and offices might be another reason for which they may resist the displacement.
Thus argument sounds unjustified and does not provide evidence and sound justification regarding the success of the industrialized zone and the also makes vague assumptions regarding executing similar actions for the opposite portion of the city. The assumptions are not based on proper plans and justification. To execute a similar plan the planning commitee should comprehensively study the feasiblity of the plan.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 507 350
No. of Characters: 2609 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.745 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.146 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.818 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 187 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 146 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 101 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 46.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 29.922 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.409 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.632 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 106, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ea in Transopolis and converted it into a an industrial zone because of which it ...
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Line 2, column 106, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'an' is left.
Suggestion: a; an
...ea in Transopolis and converted it into a an industrial zone because of which it cl...
^^^^
Line 4, column 150, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cess of industrialization and prediction of similar plan in opposite of the city ...
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Line 8, column 85, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... severly substandard housing in the area which is not justified by providing evid...
^^
Line 10, column 33, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this area' or 'those areas'?
Suggestion: this area; those areas
...efully displacing the people living in those area against their wishes. The argument furt...
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Line 10, column 158, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e increased in the particular area which is unsound because the population in tha...
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Line 12, column 101, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...is not criteria to measure the success. also argument further claims that the proper...
^^^^
Line 12, column 101, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
...is not criteria to measure the success. also argument further claims that the proper...
^^^^
Line 12, column 159, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...her claims that the property tax in that area have increased because industrializ...
^^^
Line 13, column 154, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to some factors such huge investment in other parts of the city and that might h...
^^^
Line 17, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , The
...crease in property taxes. Secondly,The argument claims to take similar actions...
^^^^
Line 17, column 149, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he structure and population distribution of both the places are different the cla...
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Line 18, column 158, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...which is not true because the area might have converted into commericial zone and...
^^^
Line 20, column 24, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...ht have adverse effect on the economy. also it claims the houses were currently uno...
^^^^
Line 20, column 24, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
...ht have adverse effect on the economy. also it claims the houses were currently uno...
^^^^
Line 21, column 4, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'their'?
Suggestion: the; their
...ays when people might have migrated to the their county houses and hence might have give...
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Line 21, column 95, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...false impression regarding the housing. also the arguments plans to displace the cur...
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Line 21, column 95, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
...false impression regarding the housing. also the arguments plans to displace the cur...
^^^^
Line 21, column 154, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...plans to displace the current population of the area which the inhabitants might ...
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Line 22, column 58, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... the inhabitants might rebel against as some of the houses contains sentimental values. peo...
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Line 22, column 106, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
...the houses contains sentimental values. people might resist the displacement also the ...
^^^^^^
Line 22, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e might resist the displacement also the proximity to schools and offices might b...
^^^
Line 26, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... they may resist the displacement. Thus argument sounds unjustified and does no...
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Line 26, column 149, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of the industrialized zone and the also makes vague assumptions regarding execut...
^^^
Line 27, column 148, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ptions are not based on proper plans and justification. To execute a similar plan...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2677.0 2260.96107784 118% => OK
No of words: 506.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29051383399 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84372518957 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.395256916996 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 847.8 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 22.8473053892 184% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 129.820281757 57.8364921388 224% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 223.083333333 119.503703932 187% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.1666666667 23.324526521 181% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58333333333 5.70786347227 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 22.0 5.15768463074 427% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 25.0 5.25449101796 476% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183303037177 0.218282227539 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071215122239 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717312371305 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0659093110432 0.128457276422 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637825413797 0.0628817314937 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.6 14.3799401198 171% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 20.39 48.3550499002 42% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.8 12.197005988 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.29 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 12.3882235529 226% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 18.8 11.1389221557 169% => OK
text_standard: 28.0 11.9071856287 235% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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