"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In this argument the author claims that opening a cafe in Monarch book store would attract customers. Additionally, he suggests to discontinue children's book section in order to free space for cafe as recent census indicates a significant decrease in percentage population under age ten. Apparently, it seems that the recommendation would prove fruitful for the Monarch bookstore, however, the author makes many unwarranted assumptions and many questions are left unanswered before inferring the conclusion.
First of all, the argument asserts without any reason that there would be an increase in customers if a cafe is opened. The author assumed it without providing any evidence and statistics. On the contrary, it could go the other way round. It is possible that the cafe's environment is too noisy for silence seeking costumers making it uncomfortable and unattractive for the readers. Or, thee costumers might dislike the coffee's taste and it might not be economically suitable. The author has not considered all these variables that might affect the number of costumers.
Secondly, the author predicts that abolishing children's book section would not affect the business as the percentage population of age under ten has declined significantly. However, the author has not considered the population of children living in the vicinity of the bookstore which might not have declined at all. Additionally, the author has assumed that the books in the children's sections are only pursued by children under age ten. Although, it is quite likely, that the books in the children section are used by teenagers as well which leaves the author wit no reason to suggest to discontinue the section.
In conclusion, the suggestions made by the arguments are based on assumptions and opening a cafe in the bookstore might not be attractive for customers
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 120, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggests discontinuing'.
Suggestion: suggests discontinuing
...uld attract customers. Additionally, he suggests to discontinue childrens book section in order to free...
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Line 3, column 264, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cafes'' or 'cafe's'?
Suggestion: cafes'; cafe's
...ther way round. It is possible that the cafes environment is too noisy for silence se...
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Line 5, column 412, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the childrens sections are only pursued by children under age ten. Although, it ...
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Line 5, column 581, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggest discontinuing'.
Suggestion: suggest discontinuing
...hich leaves the author wit no reason to suggest to discontinue the section. In conclusion, the sugg...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, in conclusion, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 294.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31292517007 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96362946982 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510204081633 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0778511581 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.571428571 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 5.70786347227 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165254339041 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594598817905 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506261342782 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112356498037 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457761313771 0.0628817314937 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.