In today's constantly developing society, people have numerous opportunities to approach and connect with the world. Therefore, the improvement of every sector and their respective governments is required to stimulate national economic growth. One of the most important factors for achieviing that is human resources.By educating a qualified workforce, a country can ensure sustainable development compared to its neighboring nations. The question is, which direction should the workforce follow: being competitive or cooperative, especially those working for the government?. This essay will present my viewpoints on this issue.
Regarding cooperation, young people being trained as future leaders can cultivate an image of friendliness and readiness to work as a team when necessary. Teamwork can help boost productivity in any field. For instance, large organizations such as the UN, WTO, WHO, etc., are the results of collaboration between many nations with the sole objective of ensuring the benefits of their territories and citizens. Additionally, industries can cooperate not only within the same sector but also across sectors, contributing significant value to society.
On the other hand, competitiveness creates a sense of tension and unfriendliness, yet it is a natural instinct present in every person, helping them explore and realize other aspects of themselves. Through comparisons with individuals at the same level or class, people will understand where they stand and what they can do to improve in the future, or they may be eliminated by opponents.In my opinion, this is beneficial as it can enhance someone's strengths in a short period if we apply this instinct in a positive way. In my field of Logistics, there is a term called 'competitive advantages', which implies the benefits of competition. It is an ideal for businesses to pursue so that customers can differentiate them from others based on specific characteristics they possess. However, unhealthy competition can not only ruin a business but also impact the world negatively. Imagine leaders of a country attempting to destroy the economy of another through conspiracy, unfavorable policies, and enticing enemies, which can lead to wars and conflicts around the globe.
"In conclusion, I believe young people should be educated in both directions to develop comprehensive leadership skills that serve their goals. But we also notice to support positive competition and avoid negative one for the sake of global evolution.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 382.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57591623037 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20671545977 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638743455497 0.4932671777 129% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3425629543 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.294117647 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4705882353 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35294117647 5.21951772744 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229990782853 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625614940564 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401461975836 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129153979816 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0125907331634 0.0667264976115 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 48.8420337079 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 12.1639044944 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.14 8.38706741573 121% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 100.480337079 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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