The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim.
it is doubtful to claim that in order to cultivate young people for leadership, it is the best to train them in terms of cooperation, and not competition. The quality of leadership is a eclectic yet complex matter, and many sublets can be included in it. Thus it is a comprehensive and profound environment that gives rise to the aptitude of leading, and not one with single factor.
First and foremost, being a leader comes from the inbuilt excellence of an individual in a particular field, in which he/she takes the leading position and is not eaily emulated. For example, mi, a leading Chinese brand in electronic devices, was established by Jun lei when he was in his early 40s. Starting from manufacturing affordable smart phones, the company has thrived and become the third largest name in the field. lei, president of the company, is clearly a leader, not for his leadership qualifications in enterprise management, but because he was an extraordinary programmer, working at another prestigious software company before the foundation of mi. Even till this day, lei is not considered a traditional 'leader', however if he was not gifted with such talent in computer science, the whole industrial legend would be nonexisted. competitions give way to differentiation, which in turn determines someone is equipped with better skills than others. And this exceptional talent, will generate infinite pools of ideas which will turn into great companies, countries, theories and discoveries, with any of them making an individual a leader in a field.
Moreover, competition refines ideas and knowledge. it is a must for a leader in the modern world to arm themselves with coherent abilities adaptive to the ever-changing society. And competition is a great method giving way to that adapting capacity. people in a competition are always curious of what there rivals are up to, in a sense so that they can catch up on them and be on the same page. being forced to learn what contemporaries are capable of will provide a positive effect in terms of leadership, because one individual can quickly be accustomed to trending knowledge and cutting edge technologies, so that they can better enhance there stance of leading.
Nevertheless, one may argue that cooperation can also provide alike atmosphere where leading individuals can further advance their abilities, however what is more likely is that by cooperating with each other, the room for advancement is limited and the path to improvements is closed. cooperations often gives rise to comfort, placating individuals that they are already qualified and stopping them from break-throughs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, third, thus, for example, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2226.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 428.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20093457944 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10230403588 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567757009346 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.9775595778 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.941176471 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1764705882 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158330517981 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507646621653 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582820700541 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0974593813745 0.150359130593 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050044644207 0.0667264976115 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.1392134831 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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