The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
To achieve success in any field, the skill of leadership plays a very important role. Governing a country, a sports team or even a business requires a combination of great skills. It also requires a lot of man hours, as there is very little that can be accomplished without the help of the people involved in it. Young people play a huge part in the government and the economy of a country, and if a harmful trait is inspired in them during their training or upbringing, the results can go south very quickly. Cooperation versus competition is a very objective matter that can be have its pros and cons on either side, but to make better decisions, cooperation plays a more significant role.
Government and politics, along with sports and industry, have one thing in common, that is, teamwork. They all have a similar structure as it all involves people using the skills they are best at to achieve a similar outcome. The people indulging in these industries are working towards the same goal. Having the ability to cooperate can help those people understand and accept different perspectives of the matter at hand, for example, while passing a bill or making a policy or law for a state, people have to come to a consensus to make it happen. If there is competition amongst them, even though there is a chance to get better results, there could be a lot of conflicts, which can be harmful. If those law or policy makers are cooperative, they can work better as a team to come to a decision that is better for the people, which is the ulitmate purpose, serving the people. Competition can urge people to do better than others, and provide better results, but to implement those results you will need the help of the team, which will eventually require cooperation.
Cooperation can help use the specialized skills of people to thier advantage as it can be a combination of useful skills coming together. Responsibilities can be divided according to whoever is best at their work, and so instead of having one good skill put to use, the team can have many good skills bringing in a better result. Competition can bring in the dilemma of people having a superiority complex which can turn out to be harmful as people will not be in a healthy environement, resulting in a more hostile environment. This will also have people not achieve as much as they are capable of. Wars can not be won without cooperation, the economy can not grow without cooperation, and sports teams can not win titles without cooperation.
So it is important to have some aspect of competition in the character traits in the young leaders of the world, as it promotes them to do better, and not be content with what they are doing or have achieved, but there is more importance of cooperation as they need it to implement their plan as it needs to be a collective effort in the end. The government would be crippling along with the economy if there was only competition instilled in the people. It is also important for young people to be taught that which side of this battle to choose when, as every situation needs a different way of handling. There is no black or white, and so if they are aware when competition will lead to better results, they should be more competitive, but they should also know when cooperation is a better route to take, they should do it. Most successes do not come from individual performances as much as they do from a team effort. To execute the plan, a leader needs their people to work together, accept their differences, and cooperate. After all, they are all working towards the same goal.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 703, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this law' or 'those laws'?
Suggestion: this law; those laws
... of conflicts, which can be harmful. If those law or policy makers are cooperative, they ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, while, after all, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.5258426966 184% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 28.0 12.4196629213 225% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2976.0 2235.4752809 133% => OK
No of words: 637.0 442.535393258 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67189952904 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02382911018 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71980547785 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.411302982732 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 941.4 704.065955056 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 11.0 1.77640449438 619% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.5303411626 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5416666667 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.29166666667 5.21951772744 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134156223608 0.243740707755 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0437793967831 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368472621952 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876967923115 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369859721715 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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