Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
This is an extremely controversial claim to make, not that this is novel, but the idea has seldom found any refuge. The statement itself opens the weak spot of those in power. such a claim obviously require some elaboration. The notion of the sentence is that we are not here to abandon the those in power but helping is dessimation of power which is extremely important for democracy to exist. This very idea paved the way for vote where after a certain period of time, mostly after five years, one get the chance to review the government. If they are satisfied they continue and if they are not then they make way for new one. Though its about further investigation that which model of voting can really keep a check on power as we have seen significant tampering of data and facts in order to manipulate to check the public from making informed decision.
That kept aside, we have not seen these model being replicated in most of the other fields mentioned like the CEO of the business does not change more often. They stay in control for significant number of years; moreover their is hardly any accountability to the public. The power to change the CEO is limited to the member of the board, much of which also contains the close associates or the family of the owner/ CEO. These open up to a which chances of biased dynastic rules. Though the important point being the stake of the public and the public instituted government in these companies. As we saw with Facebook this year, even after the massive fraud of cheating its customers off privacy company went ahead with just minimal tweaking of their privacy policy. The changes were such that it legally enabled the company to use the user's data. After the case Zuckerberg must have stepped down but such was not the case.
The primary opposition to this claim is that such change in the management of a company or a education institute will lead to instability and further lead to decrease in the quality. Such a view draws support from myth, created by the media, that companies or and educational institutes run on the individual brilliance and not on collective work and interaction. While we seen a unstated strategy used by Facebook was to take user reviews to make their product more salable.
The change in the leadership in five years can indeed make these bodies more accountable and democratic. A democracy cannot survive if its institutions are autocratic.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Such
... opens the weak spot of those in power. such a claim obviously require some elaborat...
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... the way for vote where after a certain period of time, mostly after five years, one get the c...
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Suggestion:
...nge more often. They stay in control for significant number of years; moreover th...
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Message: Did you mean 'there'?
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... significant number of years; moreover their is hardly any accountability to the pub...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'users'' or 'user's'?
Suggestion: users'; user's
... legally enabled the company to use the users data. After the case Zuckerberg must ha...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...hange in the management of a company or a education institute will lead to instab...
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...support from myth, created by the media, that companies or and educational instit...
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...not on collective work and interaction. While we seen a unstated strategy used by Fac...
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Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'saw'?
Suggestion: saw
...llective work and interaction. While we seen a unstated strategy used by Facebook wa...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ive work and interaction. While we seen a unstated strategy used by Facebook was ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, really, so, then, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2015.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 424.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75235849057 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55117500449 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533018867925 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1917421932 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.75 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155913964603 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441269595034 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036722591433 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806612714321 0.150359130593 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582145653882 0.0667264976115 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.