Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.
Since the evolution of the mankind, society has been divided into various classes. Every section of the society was allocated a specific responsibility and majorly high-class people, or aristocrats were endowed with administrative powers. But the transition of society from monarchy to democracy has rendered an equal opportunity window to all sections of the society. This mutation led the potent mundane people to rise to the pinnacle of societies hierarchy and that movement has inspired numerous of people to live up to the expectations of their ideals. We will analyze few of them in the following paragraphs.
First, almost major section of the society has some sort of ideal figure, to follow, envisaged in back of their mind. That ideal could be a living being who has battled with the challenges of life and without loosing hope of success, kept of devoting his/her life to the cause. Abraham Lincoln, for instance, after failing for 14 times finally became the first African American president of America. He has inspired million of people of African descent to go out in the society with the views that they shared. Being the ideal for millions of people one could simply have to know the ideals of the society by just learning the ideals of role model figure.
In addition to that, there could a be contention that how these role models have such large followers and even if they follow, that does not necessarily bind the followers to imitate their ideals. The reason for such momentous following is either act of courage and determination, or the urge to keep all the hard work even when they were deprived of the basic needs. Something that make followers to share the ideals with role models, is the proclivity of common people to place themselves in the shoes of their role models. For example, during second world war, the Nazi government were propagating the heroic acts, to die for the sake of motherland, of soldiers. This propaganda of portraying them as role models of the society helped scads of youth to join military and ultimately dying for the same cause that their role models did. Many studies have approbated this theory.
In Conclusion, the argument of author depicts the correct picture of the society. One can have deep insight of the character and values of the society by simply learning about the ideals of the role models of that specific period. The limitation of this theory is that it is valid if study is done for only a certain epoch.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2066.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 423.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8841607565 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54770884939 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539007092199 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2920200327 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.736842105 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2631578947 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196294761317 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589978431468 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588010105534 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123469943539 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0181745346916 0.0667264976115 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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