Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
During our parent's and grandparents' time, they used to take up jobs that would help them cater to their families and survive financially, while today's young generation is more inclined towards following their dreams and passion without taking into consideration whether their dreams would be fruitful in the future. The prompt is stating that although young people receive advice to follow their dreams, they must be more inclined towards picking up goals that are worthy. In my opinion, young people should strive at following their dreams which makes them happy rather than picking worthy goals that does not give them a satisfactory feeling based on the below example.
To begin with, the prompt is conveying that young people should emphasize more on picking worthy goals rather than heeding the advice to follow their dreams. For instance, Parents always stress the importance of government jobs and advise their children to aim for them without taking into consideration, whether that job brings satisfaction or joy to one's life. Parents think that job security is the most important priority over joy and satisfaction. While young people believe that the job of their dream would help them work much better and provide that work-life balance that they crave.
The above example illustrates that young people should follow their dreams. and the prompt is not true.
In conclusion from the above instance young people should follow their dreams.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 353, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... that job brings satisfaction or joy to ones life. Parents think that job security i...
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Line 4, column 76, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...oung people should follow their dreams. and the prompt is not true. In conclusio...
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Line 6, column 38, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... In conclusion from the above instance young people should follow their dreams....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, while, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 58.6224719101 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1225.0 2235.4752809 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 233.0 442.535393258 53% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25751072961 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 4.55969084622 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36322902894 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 215.323595506 57% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527896995708 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 348.3 704.065955056 49% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.6097322219 60.3974514979 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.5 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238092020314 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113361746447 0.0831039109588 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0856966644186 0.0758088955206 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162543166208 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457083079646 0.0667264976115 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 100.480337079 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.7820224719 153% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.