Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
A nation is comprised of diverse societies. A society constitutes of various people. Every society has their history, culture, religion and traditions. They carry their tradition in form of their values, religion and culture. They reflect their values in form of literature, architecture and social means. I don’t completely agree with the claim that governments must support the cities, in which these societies inhabit, financially so that the cultural traditions are generated.
Firstly, the societies form communities of their own in order to preserve their cultural and religious traditions. These communities arrange the necessary funds for themselves in order to sustain or develop. Hence it is not necessary for the governments to ensure funds to its cities only because they preserve nation’s cultural traditions.
Secondly, it is not necessary that only the major cities are responsible for the preservation of the culture. Many small towns or villages consist of deep cultural traditions. Hence providing financial support only to the major cities might prove redundant.
Moreover, rather than the cities being primarily concerned for the preservation of culture, it is the people who preserve culture. For example, in a major city where only modernized people live with no intention to preserve the culture of their society, funding that city with the aim of preserving its culture would be worthless. Instead, they should fund those small communities which are formed to conserve one’s society’s culture.
However, the claim that government should fund the major cities in order to thrive is accurate. A city needs financial support in order to survive. The funds can be used in infrastructure, law enforcement, public use, basic necessities such as home for poor, regulating everyday affairs etc.
On the other hand, funds are required to maintain archeological sites which, some way or other depicts nation’s cultural values. But it is the only aspect of preserving culture which explicitly requires funding of the city.
For example, Gujarati people, even though, live in different parts of the nation form communities to celebrate their traditions. These communities are not dependent of government funds in order to sustain. And effectively if we consider the same for all the societies, government funds are not necessarily needed to preserve its cultural values.
Hence I agree with the claim that the government need to ensure funds for its major cities to thrive, but the reason is not entirely true.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of' or 'is composed of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of; is composed of
A nation is comprised of diverse societies. A society constitute...
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Message: Did you mean 'consists of'?
Suggestion: consists of
...mprised of diverse societies. A society constitutes of various people. Every society has their...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...mselves in order to sustain or develop. Hence it is not necessary for the governments...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...es consist of deep cultural traditions. Hence providing financial support only to the...
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Line 8, column 218, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...structure, law enforcement, public use, basic necessities such as home for poor, regulating every...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ed to preserve its cultural values. Hence I agree with the claim that the governm...
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Line 13, column 140, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e, but the reason is not entirely true.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2172.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 395.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49873417722 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94204447638 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473417721519 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.1749429579 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4583333333 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.97078651685 161% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4183196942 0.243740707755 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128330933293 0.0831039109588 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0999036245233 0.0758088955206 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206340491246 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0654573268305 0.0667264976115 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.32 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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