Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.
Countless methods to provide better education to students have been suggested. Some people insist that stimulating them to compete with each other for getting high grades can enhance the learning quality. However, I have a different opinion. I believe excessive competition will be disadvantageous for the quality of education.
Firstly, high competition for grades might make the difficulty of exams absurd. Especially in high schools, teachers cannot let all their children receive good grades. This is because universities require them to reasonably evaluate the students with their academic performance. So, if competition for good grades is too excessive, teachers will need to make exams more difficult with questions requiring the understanding of trivial details. Then, students will need to spend their extra time studying relatively less important topics; instead of doing more valuable activities. The education that forces students to waste their time studying unhelpful materials cannot be considered high-quality. For this reason, I insist on the negative effect of competition for good grades on education quality.
Secondly, stress is an enemy of learning. If students are forced to compete for high grades, being stressed will be inevitable. Previous studies have demonstrated the causation between stress and learning abilities. To be specific, when students get stressed, their learning abilities (i.e., understanding and memorizing new information) are seriously limited. If students are incapable of exploiting their full learning abilities, the learning quality cannot be at its best. Thus, I would like to say that competition for good grades does not seem to be beneficial for education.
Of course, there is a positive effect of a competitive atmosphere to receive good grades on the quality of education. However, I believe its disadvantages including those abovementioned will outweigh its advantages. Therefore, I insist that the competition will be detrimental to the overall education quality.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 14.8657303371 13% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 58.6224719101 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 301.0 442.535393258 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.7342192691 5.05705443957 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07506984781 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541528239203 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.9290410805 60.3974514979 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.3 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.05 23.4991977007 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327580459821 0.243740707755 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.098950769285 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762841939732 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200858300783 0.150359130593 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353144583683 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.36 12.1639044944 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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