Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Teenage is a very crucial period in a student's life. These students at this age face a decision that is likely to define how the rest of their life turns out.
The prompt suggests that educational institutes should encourage students to focus on study paths that lead to lucrative/reputed careers. Even though I accept that students will find guidance very helpful I mostly disagree with the statement for 2 reasons.
First of all, all students are different, individual people with their own hobbies, interests, strengths, and weaknesses. This is the age where they grow into their own person. Trying to force them on to only “reputable”/“safe” careers will only hinder their self-growth. For example, if a student who has an interest in becoming a writer is forced or encouraged to take up STEM as a career option he/she is likely to be unhappy in their career later on.
Research has shown that people who enjoy their jobs are likely to advance further in their careers and also have a more fulfilling life.
Secondly, teenage is a very influenceable time in a person's life. Students should be taught to follow their passion and their interests. Once they do that they are likely to be more successful in their life. If they like their jobs, they will no doubt put in more effort and create a niche for themselves in their career path. Such a person is more likely to be respected. Students should not be spoon-fed and taught to be like sheep. One should not follow anyone blindly.
Imagine if Michael Jordan had been influenced to be a musician and not play basketball. He would never have been this successful in life. Hence, students should be allowed and encouraged to choose fields of study that allow them to be the best version of themselves.
I understand that they are the same people who at the age of 17 are called minors and have little to no freedom and are suddenly expected at 18 to make life-altering decisions in terms of their career path, and thus would benefit from guidance. But, if they are misguided/convinced to follow a path they are not interested in, they are not likely to thrive and succeed at their jobs. Thus I feel, that educational institutes should guide students for all types of courses and career paths instead of just focusing on the white collared jobs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 39, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
Teenage is a very crucial period in a students life. These students at this age face a...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to be unhappy in their career later on. Research has shown that people who enjoy...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rs and also have a more fulfilling life. Secondly, teenage is a very influenceabl...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...enage is a very influenceable time in a persons life. Students should be taught to foll...
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Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...llow their passion and their interests. Once they do that they are likely to be more...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ly to thrive and succeed at their jobs. Thus I feel, that educational institutes sho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, i feel, no doubt, of course, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1923.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 399.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81954887218 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85786386717 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503759398496 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 79.9888117176 60.3974514979 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.15 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.95 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.21951772744 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336930163807 0.243740707755 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101588100311 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859719299379 0.0758088955206 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164194909718 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686399962474 0.0667264976115 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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