The following is a letter from the parent of a private school student to the principal of that school:
Last year, Kensington Academy turned over management of its cafeteria to a private vendor, Swift Nutrition. This company serves low-fat, low-calorie meals that students do not find enjoyable – my son and several of his friends came home yesterday complaining about the lunch options. While the intent of hiring Swift may have been to cause students to eat healthier foods, the plan is just going to cause students to bring their own, less healthy lunches instead of eating cafeteria food. If Swift is not replaced with another vendor, there will be serious health consequences for Kensington students.
last year, Kensington academy turned over management of its cafeteria to a private vendor, Swift nutrition. this company served low-fat, low-calorie meals that students are not finding enjoyable, and this based on the review given by a parent of a student currently studying there. hence it is assumed that students will start bringing their own less healthier meals resulting in certain health consequences for the students there. while the entire situation lacks certain information, a few things need to be looked up before arriving at a conclusion.
firstly, it needs to be considered that the entire review about swift is based on the words of a couple of children who might as well be joking at the time to avoid their current meals, or if they were highly fond of the earlier meal providers. it also doesn't mention if the children are middle school kids or teenagers because a recent study had shown that teenagers, upon the arrival of puberty are most prone to change in food habits and being moody about the same. a similar scenario could be possible for the kid and his friends mentioned in the letter.
secondly, the meal program has been into existence for a year hence each and every parent is aware about the same, also the kensington academy might be charging an annual fee for the same. Keeping this into mind it should be considered that the parents are less likely to send the kids with meals from home or provide lunch money on daily basis using which the children could buy lesser healthy meals from outside.
Also replacing swift with another vendor doesn't ensure that all the students will surely eat from the newly appointed vendor. with the social media providing various content on different types of food the kids are sure to revolt against any meal plan that is presented to them on a weekly basis but with the above mentioned points and the basic urge of hunger, it will eventually habituate them to co-exist with the meal system being provided to them. the current system at Kensington falls under the same and also provides a good nutritional balance with Swift Nutrition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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last year, Kensington academy turned over ma...
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...a to a private vendor, Swift nutrition. this company served low-fat, low-calorie mea...
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Suggestion: Hence
... of a student currently studying there. hence it is assumed that students will start ...
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Suggestion: hence,
... of a student currently studying there. hence it is assumed that students will start ...
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Message: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean 'less healthy'?
Suggestion: less healthy
... students will start bringing their own less healthier meals resulting in certain health conse...
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Suggestion: While
...th consequences for the students there. while the entire situation lacks certain info...
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...up before arriving at a conclusion. firstly, it needs to be considered that the ent...
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Suggestion: It
...hly fond of the earlier meal providers. it also doesnt mention if the children are...
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Suggestion: doesn't
... of the earlier meal providers. it also doesnt mention if the children are middle scho...
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... habits and being moody about the same. a similar scenario could be possible for ...
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Suggestion: Secondly
... his friends mentioned in the letter. secondly, the meal program has been into existen...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...uy lesser healthy meals from outside. Also replacing swift with another vendor doe...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...lso replacing swift with another vendor doesnt ensure that all the students will surel...
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Suggestion: With
...ly eat from the newly appointed vendor. with the social media providing various cont...
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Suggestion: The
...the meal system being provided to them. the current system at Kensington falls unde...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 361.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84487534626 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37363958297 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578947368421 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.7532770731 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.75 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0833333333 23.4991977007 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 5.21951772744 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286064431752 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114015295503 0.0831039109588 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145305570994 0.0758088955206 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165958654761 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.142882160782 0.0667264976115 214% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.1392134831 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.