"The following was used as part of an internet advertising company's appeal to businesses: Furniture Depot employed our internet advertising company to help. Since then its sales increased by 10% over last year's totals. Furniture Depot's success demonstrates how using our internet services can increase your profitability. "
An internet advertisement company claimed that they are responsible for an increase in furniture company's overall profit. They claimed that because of their advertisement on internet, company's overall profit has increased. They also claimed that furniture company's 10 percent increase in sale is the example of how internet advertisement can increase profit and business. But there are many loopholes in this argument. Writer gave not proper evidences.
Internet advertisement company claimed that furniture company's profit increase because of their advertisement on internet. But there is no proof that furniture company gave advertisement on internet only. That can possible that furniture company had also gave advertisement on another medium like a television. There is also no evidence that furniture company only gave advertisement on that internet advertisement company only, there can other internet advertisement company too who got deal to do advertisement of that furniture company. And that can possible that because of other advertisement company, furniture company got benefits. .
Internet advertisement company also claimed that furniture company's profit increase 10 percent because of them. There is no proper evidence that proves that furniture company's profit only increase by internet advertisement. Of course, this can one reason behind it, but there can many more reasons for it like product quality, product cost, product's demand, company's brand value etc.That can possible that furniture company expanded they business this year only and because of that they got increase in profit.
Internet advertisement company also claimed that this furniture company's success shows that their internet advertisement can improve any other company's profit. But there is only data of the furniture company in their claim. There is no data about other clients of that internet advertisement company. So this can be biased. By showing data of only one company, internet advertisement company can not generalize it. That can be possible that other client of the internet advertisement company did not get any benefits.
Thus in conclusion, we can say that internet advertisement company's claim can be correct, but it can be partially correct. Internet advertisement company does not provide any proper evidence. So there are many flaws in this argument. So there can be also other side of it and can be many other possibility as mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'give'?
Suggestion: give
...here is no proof that furniture company gave advertisement on internet only. That ca...
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Line 3, column 256, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'given'.
Suggestion: given
...ossible that furniture company had also gave advertisement on another medium like a ...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ompany, furniture company got benefits. . Internet advertisement company also ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: That
...oducts demand, companys brand value etc.That can possible that furniture company exp...
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Line 7, column 425, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...company can not generalize it. That can be possible that other client of the inter...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...t company did not get any benefits. Thus in conclusion, we can say that internet...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so, thus, in conclusion, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.3162921348 221% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 58.6224719101 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 373.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60589812332 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9806119001 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 215.323595506 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.343163538874 0.4932671777 70% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 697.5 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.59117977528 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.3324349557 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.9130434783 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2173913043 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.95652173913 5.21951772744 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340977782369 0.243740707755 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162317003607 0.0831039109588 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112290408393 0.0758088955206 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250204082302 0.150359130593 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832540125891 0.0667264976115 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 29.86 48.8420337079 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.96 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.59 8.38706741573 79% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 100.480337079 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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