Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The goal of any education system is to impart a child the rules and laws of nature, the sciences behind the functioning of the world, the causes and consequences of the historic events, the meaning of the poems and art, etc. In short, a child is taught whatever has been already established, philosophized, ideated, debated or postulated. Right from the time his parents nurture him with the principles, morals and behavior conforming to the societal and cultural mores, to the time the child is taught about the laws of addition and multiplication in his school he is trained to only absorb the already established, the rules, and the norms. When the child grows up, the mental set up would be to succeed by gobbling up facts, charts and laws. Seldom is the child encouraged to think outside what is established or deemed proper. Seldom is he exhorted to question the reasons behind the laws and rules, the rationale behind the prayers he is made to recite, or discover a flaw in concluded reasoning. Formal education whether it starts at home or school, tend to restrain our minds and spirits, rather than set them free.
By the time when the child reaches his high school, he has been trained and moulded not to question the unknown and never to seek the untold mysteries. Through tests and examinations, he is wrought to memorize, answer and score high in order to succeed. The grades decide their future. Homework, assignments and bulky textbooks, all resonate the importance of scoring high. And regardless of whether it is peer or parental pressure, or self consciousness, the student would try his best to keep abreast of the competition. Even when the student scores high, he is again made to take tests and competitive exams for securing an admission to a prestigious college. This is again repeated when he would seek admission into a university, or a sustaining job. In short, the life of a child is bound within the realm of competition and at each step, it will be his base, his formal education that will determine his success rate. The skills developed in the formative years determine how the child will sustain in the world.
Rabindra Nath Tagore, the Nobel laureate established an institution called ‘Shantiniketan’ wherein pupils would not be bound within the four walls of a classroom, but instead obtain education in the lap of nature. Tagore was of the view that the inquisitve minds of children needs to be tapped, need to be allowed to expand and be imaginative. It was this thought that drew him to open an institution where students can question, create, imagine and feel the bounty of nature. This simplicity and unrestrained independence of the soul was successful in rejuvenating the souls of the young and adult students alike. We need institutions like Shantiniketan to have a holistic education and not just formal, mechanized education that curbs our imagination and restrain the soul within us.
Formal education in countries like Finland and Norway are particularly different from most other nations. Forbes Magazine cites that these countries have the best education policies and state that they produce highly efficient scholars and professionals. Well, the secret lies in their approach towards educating students holistically during their formative years. They do not confine students within classrooms or urge them to devour textbooks. Instead, the students during their early years of education are seldom made to study the textbooks. They are taken out into the world to see things for real, to learn by being in close contact with the world outside, lets them imagine and question the things they find amiss. This enhances their perspectives, and teaches them to find an answer to whatever they think is lacking. This urges them to innovate, discover, and make contributions necessary for the world around them.
Finally, any kind of restrained formal education confines the majority of us to concentrate only on materialistic and putative goals. It lends us a parochial mind, that is unable to be stretched beyond what is taught within the curriculums. This limits the independence of our thoughts and imaginations. Hence formal education restrains our minds and spirit rather than set them free.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'hence', 'if', 'so', 'well', 'in short', 'kind of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.226923076923 0.240241500013 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.178205128205 0.157235817809 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0679487179487 0.0880659088768 77% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0333333333333 0.0497285424764 67% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0602564102564 0.0444667217837 136% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0974358974359 0.12292977631 79% => OK
Participles: 0.0474358974359 0.0406280797675 117% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.83313673242 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0384615384615 0.030933414821 124% => OK
Particles: 0.00512820512821 0.0016655270985 308% => OK
Determiners: 0.110256410256 0.0997080785238 111% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0102564102564 0.0249443105267 41% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0153846153846 0.0148568991511 104% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 4263.0 2732.02544248 156% => OK
No of words: 702.0 452.878318584 155% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.07264957265 6.0361032391 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.14735685561 4.58838876751 112% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.367521367521 0.366273622748 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.266381766382 0.280924506359 95% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.195156695157 0.200843997647 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.128205128205 0.132149295362 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83313673242 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Unique words: 347.0 219.290929204 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494301994302 0.48968727796 101% => OK
Word variations: 64.1827689685 55.4138127331 116% => OK
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6194690265 160% => OK
Sentence length: 21.2727272727 23.380412469 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1659644966 59.4972553346 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.181818182 141.124799967 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2727272727 23.380412469 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.242424242424 0.674092028746 36% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.21349557522 115% => OK
Readability: 47.9109039109 51.4728631049 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.3679245283 1.64882698954 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.446942298823 0.391690518653 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.106834352785 0.123202303941 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0685966357419 0.077325440228 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.483415068919 0.547984918172 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.158693784238 0.149214159877 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171294492048 0.161403998019 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768218893018 0.0892212321368 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.471108009241 0.385218514788 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.148851274302 0.0692045440612 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.327564933786 0.275328986314 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432380128368 0.0653680567796 66% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.4325221239 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.30420353982 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88274336283 287% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 15.0 7.22455752212 208% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.70907079646 295% => OK
Total topic words: 24.0 13.5995575221 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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