The statement general welfare of a nation's people is better indication of that nation's greatness than are the achievements of its rulers,artists, or scientists is absolutely right and i completely agree with the author statement. A Nation is know as collective of people it does not indicate specific person.The overall growth and general welfare of people indicates the nation greatness.
Firstly,there many other nations in which artists, scientists or rulers gained immense praise and recognition, while the general people in their country suffered very much. For example in North Korea the leader is famous for developing nuclear bombs but there own people suffered in unhygienic and poor conditions. Saudi Arabia is oil rich country but with poor environmental conditions, people suffer more because of those conditions. Based on one factor we cannot decide the nations greatness. Inspite of being oil rich country people are living in miserable conditions.
Secondly,GDP is the factor by which nations greatness is measured. It indicates the country population greatness by which general welfare of the people is determined. Though the rulers or artist get name to their respective nation, but its very own nation people are suffering from poor conditions that can't indicate the nation's greatness, when the people in their nation lives in hygienic and stabilized conditions nation's greatness is determined.
Finally, the rulers, artists or scientists try hard to get name to their nation which is commendable but ones well being comes first, so nations greatness should be determined on the basis of welfare of people.
The statement is that common
The statement is that common welfare of a nation's people is a better indication of nation's greatness rather than the achievements its rulers, artists or scientists. a nation is said to be great when common people are very satisfied by their living facilities. if there are adequate of job position created by government, people can freely talk or criticize their rulers, better food production which develop our economy are commonly known as welfare of a nation's people. they are also indicators of a nations greatness. on the other hand , the role of rulers , scientists or artists are very important for a nation . the increasing developments of higher field also bring honor for a nation. a nation should provide extra care to build world leader or scientist or artist. north korea is very well known for his dictator ruler but the country people suffered very much for food , education or proverty. so this type of ruler is not welcoming. moreover american president bill clinton is very well known for his sustainable economy on his timeline.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 58.6224719101 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1385.0 2235.4752809 62% => OK
No of words: 253.0 442.535393258 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4743083004 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.55969084622 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89148197834 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 215.323595506 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525691699605 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 704.065955056 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.8216043343 60.3974514979 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.909090909 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27272727273 5.21951772744 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364619748317 0.243740707755 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158034428352 0.0831039109588 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108701616568 0.0758088955206 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246098832717 0.150359130593 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111207058908 0.0667264976115 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 100.480337079 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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