Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Art of a society is mirror of the thoughts or beliefs of the the society.It is reflection of the values of the people of that locality which sets them apart from others. The speaker here claims that the government should invest in arts as much they do in military. However there are some cases in which art might need some financial help of he government i strongly disagree with the speaker.
Firstly the main reason for my disagreement with the speaker is for one simple quandary,is it the duty of the government to preserve or promote art? According to me the primary duty of the government is to satiate the basic needs of the people like electricity,water,shelter and security. Art is something which is not a basic need in order to keep life moving. When in analogy of art with military it is no doubt that military is quite more important than art. The government can invest in art but not at the cost of compromising basic neccessities. For example consider a case in which two countries are between a horrendous war at such time the responsibility of the government lies in mainly sufficing the basic requisites of the people and security not in art.
Secondly art is something that must be preserved and promoted by public. It is true that art reflects the beliefs of a certain locality so it is the duty of the people to preserve it or burgeon it. In many countries there are many private organization or communities which completely devotes all of it's efforts to art preservation.For example a society in india named "Kalasmita" preserves art and even promotes it by frequently holding events.
However there are some cases in which the government might have to come and step in. For example consider a form of art in a country which is dying and no private or public support is available to it. In such cases the government should make an effort to revive it.But before investing in the art the government officials must investigate thoroughly the reason of abandonment of the art and after the investigation if the reason for restoring and reviving the art is defensible enough than only the government must invest in it but not at the cost of compromising basic needs of the people of that locality.For example consider a unique music playing style of a community which is no longer appreciated nor attracts anyone anymore,in such situation the art must not be forcefully revived.
Thus according to me the government in some situation should make an effort either financially or in any other manner to preserve or promote art but the effort must not be at the cost of compromising the basic needs of the people.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'thus', 'apart from', 'for example', 'no doubt', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.245901639344 0.240241500013 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.151639344262 0.157235817809 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0635245901639 0.0880659088768 72% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0532786885246 0.0497285424764 107% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0327868852459 0.0444667217837 74% => OK
Prepositions: 0.151639344262 0.12292977631 123% => OK
Participles: 0.0368852459016 0.0406280797675 91% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.04680534752 2.79330140395 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0225409836066 0.030933414821 73% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.135245901639 0.0997080785238 136% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0225409836066 0.0249443105267 90% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0204918032787 0.0148568991511 138% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2645.0 2732.02544248 97% => OK
No of words: 458.0 452.878318584 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.77510917031 6.0361032391 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.58838876751 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.32096069869 0.366273622748 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.251091703057 0.280924506359 89% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.176855895197 0.200843997647 88% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.128820960699 0.132149295362 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04680534752 2.79330140395 109% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 219.290929204 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.427947598253 0.48968727796 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.2249897625 55.4138127331 85% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6194690265 78% => OK
Sentence length: 28.625 23.380412469 122% => OK
Sentence length SD: 122.155574474 59.4972553346 205% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 165.3125 141.124799967 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.625 23.380412469 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8125 0.674092028746 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.21349557522 269% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 53.7341703057 51.4728631049 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.8275862069 1.64882698954 111% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365249767086 0.391690518653 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.171691060851 0.123202303941 139% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.119064339667 0.077325440228 154% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.61375345961 0.547984918172 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.183227203854 0.149214159877 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.184252192839 0.161403998019 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.163093860838 0.0892212321368 183% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.538874621907 0.385218514788 140% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0636947842969 0.0692045440612 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263825718999 0.275328986314 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0912102287793 0.0653680567796 140% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.5995575221 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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