If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it are justifiable. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The speaker asserts that as long as goal is worthy, any means taken to attain it are justifiable. Indeed, stopping at nothing to attain goal can help us fulfill some purposes. However, if any means taken to attain goal are extreme, it has a negative influence on society and individuals. There are three kinds of fields, including economic, political, and entertainment fields, can reflect the negative effect. In my point of view, I strongly disagree with the speaker.
To begin with, in the economic fields, any means taken to attain goal will cause economic recession. It is common that companies want to earn more profit, which is a worthy goal to them, but if they stop at nothing to get what they want, they will cause social conflicts and economic disorder. Unfair competition can be an example. Since unfair competition cause economic injury to a business through deceptive or wrong business practices, it will lead to economic disorder. In sum, even though the goal is worthy, stopping at nothing to get it will harm the economy.
Secondly, in the political area, stopping at nothing to get goal will induce political disorder, while the goal is worthy. To many politicians, becoming a president is their final and worthy goal. However, when they stop at nothing to get what they want in order to be a president, they cause social disorder. Africa conflict is an example. For own interest, Africa’s leaders star many wars in Africa without minding victims. In a word, in the political area, if leaders stop at nothing to achieve the goal, it will lead to social disorder.
Finally ,in the entertainment fields, any means taken to attain goal will result unfair competition, even if the goal is worthy. To actors, wanting to be a well-known is reasonable goal, which is worthy to them. However, if they stop at nothing to obtain the goal, it may cause improper things to happen. Unspoken rules in Korea can be an illustration. In Korea, because many actresses want to be famous, they stop at nothing to attain their goal. In addition, in order to get opportunity of plays, they slept with director. As a result, many actresses commit a suicide, since such insult are unbearable. In brief, if people stop at nothing to attain the goal, it is necessary to happen some improper things, even impairing themselves.
To sum up, in economic, political, and entertainment fields, any means taken to attain goal will cause a negative effect on society and individuals. Therefore, I totally disagree with what the speaker says.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
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Suggestion: ,
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Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, in brief, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2114.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 428.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93925233645 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69365672118 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418224299065 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 3.10617977528 386% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 4.38483146067 411% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.897206959 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.3076923077 118.986275619 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4615384615 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30769230769 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 18.0 5.13820224719 350% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143717532307 0.243740707755 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052806423134 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513874362573 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105006810206 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375198223429 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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