If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it is justifiable.
undoubtedly, goals are the main drive for the development of people and and sosieties.While every nation and human has defined his own perspective according to his abilities and situation, people should be reminded of the fact that not every goal justifies any action for reaching it. In my opinion, depending on how much our dreams deserve and whether they hurt our surroundings and relatives, we should set our goals.
Governments of every society have defined purposes for the progress. Although many take the power as priority instead of the ease and welfare of their people.Many despotic governments are formed as a result of cruelty and lack of consideration to their surroundings. Their goals is indeed increasing their power at the cost of suppressing their people, stifling any criticism and hurting the heretics of society is what they do to preserve their standings.likewise,Many other procedures don't deserve the endeavour,such as factories which earn huge profits at the cost of inflicting massive damages to the environment .These organizations not only harm the environment and animals, but also people of societies, natural resourses and even thmeselves as an integral element.Hence, reaching the goals should ensure the benign procedure and least damage to our environment in order to be worth for the attempts.
on the other hand, there are many situations that require us to rest less in order to succeed.For example, to become successful, many students are obliged to study long hours, communicate less and have less leisure time.Such goals are deserved the difficulty we endure to reach them. An athlete has to undergo demanding excersice and work out in order to win the gold medals.There are many valuable goals in our private life that put us in extreme situations but pay well at the end when we reach our dreams.Societies as a whole also set some daunting goals in order to develop.For example, elevating the economy,eduaction,health care needs severe attempts and collaboration of officials and people to ensure the attainmant of their ideals.
In summary, each goal depending on its merits for the indivuals and society as a whole should be considered separately in order to define its advantages, and whether they deserve every attempt to attain them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, likewise, so, well, while, as to, for example, in summary, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1926.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 366.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26229508197 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25409721362 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53825136612 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.2370786517 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 45.0 23.0359550562 195% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 172.779302869 60.3974514979 286% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 240.75 118.986275619 202% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 45.75 23.4991977007 195% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.875 5.21951772744 323% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 7.80617977528 231% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0871781834461 0.243740707755 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0373155587765 0.0831039109588 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0334677150655 0.0758088955206 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0598874561896 0.150359130593 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0127255443265 0.0667264976115 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.2 14.1392134831 185% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 17.34 48.8420337079 36% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.0 12.1743820225 181% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.12 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.31 8.38706741573 123% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 20.0 11.2143820225 178% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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