The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Modern day inventions have made our quotidian task easier and mundane lives entertaining, the impact of these inventions in current times is immeasurable. On the contrary, it can also be argued that these luxuries have slowed the pace of evolutions and development of the human race, by making people torpor and phlegmatic. To say that developing new luxuries has slowed and paused growth of a race is ironic, when these luxuries are result of great creative minds. These inventions help people develop: those who make them develop critical thinking, and ones who use these develop skills of using them and can often provide services and appease others, for social development of the society.
The gifts of modern contemporary world are many, which are more of a need than wants of an individual. Waking up in the morning by ringing alarm clocks, having a warm shower, by the virtue of electric heaters, commuting to work on a motor vehicle, working on modern day computers, and coming back home to talk to your loved ones over mobile phones has made our life more comfortable and productive. Ones these simple day to day tasks took hours, which now take minutes. There is no reason to say that these prevent growth of strong individuals or hinder growth of truly strong people.
Due to evolution of the society most luxuries are slowing becoming needs due to their effectiveness and ease of use, this helps making an individual self reliant in many ways. Earlier for a relaxing massage after a stressful day, one had to drive or walk to the massage parlor. Now we have gadgets which can provide a massage at the comfort of your house. Many other such services and products have made individuals truly independent. These are luxuries for some but a need for others, no clear distinctions can be made about the needs and luxuries in today's world. Need of one maybe luxury of another and vice versa.
Coming to the topic of developing society and making people independent, a truly independent person in one who can survive not alone but even between a crowd where he has to accommodate everyone. As, we live in a global society, seclusion is not true independence but living in harmony is, modern luxuries to some extent help in solving this issue, with devices which can translate for better communication, enable exchange of thoughts between people from different indigenous places. These luxuries have united the world and brought people closer than ever before, by connecting the via different inventions like telephones, mails etc.
True independence and strong individuals are the people who can work along and use contemporary gadgets and luxuries to bring the world closer together and make it a better place for everyone, this will ensure strong development of the global society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... coming back home to talk to your loved ones over mobile phones has made our life mo...
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Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to make' or 'make'.
Suggestion: to make; make
...ffectiveness and ease of use this helps making an individual self reliant in many ways...
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Line 5, column 322, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...have gadgets which can provide a massage at the comfort of your house Many other ...
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Line 5, column 610, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e maybe luxury of another and vice versa Coming to the topic of developing societ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, as to, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2289.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 468.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89102564103 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55009976328 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491452991453 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 752.4 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.2370786517 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 468.0 23.0359550562 2032% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 60.3974514979 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2289.0 118.986275619 1924% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 468.0 23.4991977007 1992% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 46.0 5.21951772744 881% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 10.2758426966 10% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21125560521 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.21125560521 0.0831039109588 254% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0758088955206 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130373454701 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326768779575 0.0667264976115 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 235.6 14.1392134831 1666% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -403.54 48.8420337079 -826% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.92365168539 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 185.8 12.1743820225 1526% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.56 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 29.99 8.38706741573 358% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 11.8971910112 471% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 189.2 11.2143820225 1687% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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