“In most societies, competition generally has more of negative than a positive effect”.

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“In most societies, competition generally has more of negative than a positive effect”.

We live in a world that demands the best out of us. There is no doubt that our communities and societies are the most competitive in the history of time. Due to this reason, debates have risen whether competitions have more negative than positive effect on our lives. The statement above is also on the similar lines. However, I strongly believe that competition brings out the best out of us, and thus best out of the society.
To begin with, competitions help society to grow. Since societies consists of people, competitions challenges individuals to push themselves out of their comfort zone and think outside the box. These individuals have pivotal role in eradicating many of the problems the society face. For instance, governmental elections can be seen as a form of competition. Such a competition calls courageous and confident individuals to come out the common mass to declare their candidacy along with their agendas to help the society grow, by carefully understanding the problems faced by the people of the that society. This competition helps the common man to determine the best leader out the best. Therefore, competition helps people to come out their comfort zones to be the spearhead of a society’s growth, by addressing and overcoming the challenges faced by them.
Secondly, competition calls for an individual to be active and helps to instill knowledge. As we know “Knowledge is power”. Therefore, this is pivotal for the development of the wellbeing of an individual. It is a universal fact that all human beings are not the same. People belong to different social and financial backgrounds. Some individuals have the privileges of life, while others are not gifted with the same. However, it is to be understood that there is a competitive spirit within us. Therefore, competition motivates us to rise up from our quotidian way of living and to become achievers in life. For instance, we know that the GRE is an exam that is required for an individual to take to get admission into the best graduate schools available. However, it is also to be understood that such an exam provides an opportunity to dive into the rich vocabulary and learn the various words that could help us in improving the beautiful language of English. Moreover, such an exam requires us to pay attention to detail , be organized and prepare and execute a study plan according to our demands. Such values are required for an individual to be successful in life. In short competition allows us to be an achiever than a doer.
However, just being competitive has the potential that can be detrimental to the health of society. In order to facilitate growth of a society, competition and cooperation must work hand in hand. Just being competitive, allows us to be productive and efficient inn our day to day work just like machines: productive, efficient, but soulless. Today’s world challenges us to be competitive and cooperative. It is with these qualities can our society thrive the hardships of time. For example, news breaking issues such as climate change affect not only the present generation but also the future generation. Being just competitive makes us answerable to our children about why we couldn’t stop these issues. However, the key to solve these problems start with cooperation. For example, the various countries have pledged the reduction of carbon footprint to resolve global warming. However, it is with cooperation that this could be achieved. Developed nations could lend a helping hand to developing nations by reducing latter carbon footprint by availing access to technology developed by the former countries. Through cooperation, we become one team irrespective of our nationality, social and financial background to tackle such global situations. Through cooperation, we could leran from our mistakes from one another, be a better man and resolve issues that threaten the very existence of our life.
To conclude, competition along with cooperation helps a society to grow and spread its wing sof prosperity. Cometiton challneges an individual to thik outside the box and provides room for development.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1036, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in short, no doubt, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 104.0 58.6224719101 177% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3486.0 2235.4752809 156% => OK
No of words: 676.0 442.535393258 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15680473373 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.09901951359 4.55969084622 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03080396355 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 313.0 215.323595506 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463017751479 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1110.6 704.065955056 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 40.0 20.2370786517 198% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.6636807149 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.15 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.225 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.83258426966 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135092890628 0.243740707755 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0376705756541 0.0831039109588 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606047263652 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806669756813 0.150359130593 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451813217855 0.0667264976115 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 160.0 100.480337079 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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