A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Before matriculating into college, students learn substantial knowledges. Although they have been exposed under same national curriculum nowadays, I disagree with this policy according to following reasons.
Granted, some rudimentary subjects should be taught in common. Basic math and history can be two good examples of this rudiments. In case of the basic math, to form the basic economical ability to managing the money, it is obvious that every people should know about that. In addition, in case of the basic history, to know and understand their ancestor’s effort, it is also obvious that every people should know about that. Thus, some of the subjects should be subsumed in national curriculum.
However, there are substantial time to study before matriculating into college. In case of the math and history as mentioned above, in South Korea, students even must study about calculus and ancient poetry before they enter college. Both of them cannot be treated as the basics for the living. They should spend substantial time to learn useless knowledge, without their intention, just for their grades to enter the college. Therefore, not every subject has to be mandatory.
Furthermore, every student has different talents. Nowadays, knowledge and technologies have been highly diverged, which denotes that ordinary people hardly know the other subjects except their majors, and even the social systems are constructed firmly for the cooperation between other majors. Thus, it is better to put their efforts in study about their major, not in other majors for their future. Even the effectiveness is different between studying talented subjects and studying non-talented subjects. Thus, if every subject is being mandatory, they may lose their opportunity to improve their professions.
Because of aforementioned reasons, I disagree with the opinion that the nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. Of course, some of the subjects should be taught, but it is not effective to give same lecture for all student before their matriculation.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 115, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...and history can be two good examples of this rudiments. In case of the basic math, t...
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Line 2, column 432, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ry people should know about that. Thus, some of the subjects should be subsumed in national...
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Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...um until they enter college. Of course, some of the subjects should be taught, but it is no...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, as to, in addition, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 330.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41818181818 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73960176203 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50303030303 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.6720547128 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1052631579 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3684210526 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214571401259 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723070340237 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0964113470531 0.0758088955206 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152338941867 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116651745556 0.0667264976115 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.86 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 115, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...and history can be two good examples of this rudiments. In case of the basic math, t...
^^^^
Line 2, column 432, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ry people should know about that. Thus, some of the subjects should be subsumed in national...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...um until they enter college. Of course, some of the subjects should be taught, but it is no...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, as to, in addition, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 330.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41818181818 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73960176203 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50303030303 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.6720547128 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1052631579 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3684210526 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214571401259 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723070340237 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0964113470531 0.0758088955206 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152338941867 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116651745556 0.0667264976115 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.86 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.