Progress should be the aim of any great society people too often cling unnecessarily to obsolete ways of thinking and acting because of both a high comfort level and a fear of the unknown

Progress is very important for the society and for the people, whether it is mental, physical or progress of the work done by thousands of people. But not everybody be able to progress because of some reasons which I am going to discuss further. The above statement says that progress should be the aim of the society, it also adds that people cling unnecessarily to obsolete ways of thinking and acting because of high level of comfort and fear of unknown. I agree to some extent with the statement.

To begin with, it is not easy for everybody to set the aim for what to do in the life, it is quite difficult for the people who are ill-literate. who does not have work, are these people looking for the job or setting the aim? Societies are very huge and there are lots of things people have to do for surviving. There are two sides of the coin, people have to consider both the sides before they say anything or take any action. On the other hand, our society includes a lot of prosperous people, for these type of people it is not exacting to set aim in their lives, they will say yes only, as they have money, they have work, they do not need to bother about much. They can easily take step towards progress but not poor or middle-class people. That is why people cling to obsolete ways to do the things, they cannot think beyond that point.

In addition to this, it is true that there is a fear of unknown, some people have fear if they do new work or business, it will be good for them or not, a lot of questions rise in their minds. Some people are outstanding in some fields such as dancing, acting, painting, but they never get a chance to show their hidden talent and skill. How there will be progress? Very less students get the chance to showcase their talent. It is very easy for the people who have money, they always find their way.

Furthermore, when we think about the progress of the environment, the nature, the habitat, some people are obstinate that they never agree to the things told them how to preserve the nature. They just think of themselves only. For example: if a person goes to park, he has a wrapper of the food he ate, he will never stand and walk to the dustbin just a few steps away, he will leave it there only where he was sitting. These obstinate and selfish people only think about their comfort and not anything else. In this condition, how we can expect from the society for the progress. Before doing this, we should teach people how we can develop the society and environment and what are the benefits will they get in the future.

To conclude this, I would like to say that there are different people live in society, not everyone thinks in the same way as others do. We have to tell people what to do , how to do, they need to stir up, because, many people are unaware of all these things. Awareness is necessary among the people, only that the society can achieve what it wants.

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Average: 7.5 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 125, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...e, it is quite difficult for the people who are ill-literate. who does not have work, a...
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Line 3, column 147, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Who
...lt for the people who are ill-literate. who does not have work, are these people lo...
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Line 5, column 372, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun students is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...skill. How there will be progress? Very less students get the chance to showcase the...
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Line 9, column 171, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rs do. We have to tell people what to do , how to do, they need to stir up, becaus...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, so, for example, in addition, such as, it is true, to begin with, in the same way, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 33.0505617978 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2396.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 545.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39633027523 5.05705443957 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22477043985 2.79657885939 80% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438532110092 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 749.7 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 6.24550561798 384% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5851203111 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.84 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264534309844 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866340027651 0.0831039109588 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110307980841 0.0758088955206 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169068758546 0.150359130593 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116855007718 0.0667264976115 175% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 12.1639044944 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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