Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
The speaker asserts that human beings are responsible in front of extinction of other species just in the case that this extinction is a result of human activity. While many may believe it is a logical statement, I think it is our responsibility to save all other species in this world. Because we are all living in a huge ecosystem and if a species is out of the cycle it may harm all of us. Moreover, as human beings are conquering the world and doing whatever they want, we cannot be sure that even the rarest cause of species extinction is not due to our activities. Thus, humans should make effort to save all of endangered species.
First, we should know that our world is a big ecosystem and every species is a member with certain roles. Thus, if a member of the ecosystem is omitted direct and indirect consequences may harm other members. That is to say it is not important if the extinction is result of human activities or not, we should save the endangered species for saving the whole ecosystem. For instance, suppose a condition that a special tree is endangered, If we say that we are not responsible for its cause and don’t care for it, that tree may get destroyed forever. That’s while that tree may be house of many other species. Its fruits perhaps are foods for other animals. Moreover, the animals that live on it may be foods for other predators. Therefore, its extinction may result in extinction or at least harming of other animals. That is to say, human beings, as the most talented species of the ecosystem should care about problems of the ecosystem.
Second, in some cases it is possible that if we do not care for extinction of species the issue which caused the extinction gets stronger and threatens the whole ecosystem. Thus in many cases it is important to find the extinction root and destroy it in order to save the ecosystem. For example, when Avian influenza got viral and many birds were getting destroyed we could just don’t care about the situation and think the virus is not result of human activities. However, scientists searched to invent a medicine for it. That's because although the virus was not developed by human activities, it was a disease which could fly with birds. That bird could fly from continent to continent and make that disease epidemic in whole world. Moreover, avian influenza is not just for birds and the virus may permeate in human's body. Thus, if we do not care about extinction of those birds it may even lead to extinction of human beings.
However, some people may believe that if human beings are not responsible for a change its devise of the mother nature and we shouldn't do anything about it. Furthermore, they may say it is harmful for nature if human beings interfere with these types of extinction. That may seem canny at first glance. However, this question rises that how can we prove that humans are not responsible for a type of extinction? Since we are conquering the world and our population is about 8 billion who are living in every point of the earth with a vast range of activities it is possible that we do not understand consequences of our activities. That is to say, maybe at first it seems that we are not responsible for an occurrence. Nevertheless, after researches it is possible that we understand that occurrence had happened due to our activities. In this case we can refer to the creditable rule called chaos law which says a butterflies flattering in Singapore may result a hurricane in California. Therefore, those who believe we shouldn’t interfere with laws of mother nature should consider that we are doing different activities that we ourselves may not know about their consequences.
To sum it up, while it may seem that some extinctions are not resulted by our activities we are responsible for saving other species. That’s because we are the conquering species of the earth and we should save the equilibrium of the ecosystem. Moreover, in many cases the cause of an extinction may cause extinction of human beings. Furthermore, as our knowledge is not complete it is possible that after many years we recognize that cause of an extinction was our activities. Thus, human beings are responsible of extinction of other species whether we are responsible for creating that extinction or not.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 170, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
...on is a result of human activity. While many may believe it is a logical statement, I th...
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Line 5, column 174, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...nger and threatens the whole ecosystem. Thus in many cases it is important to find t...
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Line 7, column 920, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a butterfly' or simply 'butterflies'?
Suggestion: a butterfly; butterflies
...itable rule called chaos law which says a butterflies flattering in Singapore may result a hu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, thus, while, at least, for example, for instance, i think, in many cases, in some cases, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 47.0 19.5258426966 241% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 28.0 12.4196629213 225% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 38.0 11.3162921348 336% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 102.0 33.0505617978 309% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3600.0 2235.4752809 161% => OK
No of words: 757.0 442.535393258 171% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75561426684 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.24534393385 4.55969084622 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71367269245 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.332892998679 0.4932671777 67% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1142.1 704.065955056 162% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 6.24550561798 304% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 3.10617977528 386% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.2370786517 178% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3925788017 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0277777778 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36111111111 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.83258426966 310% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210009534546 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075376867377 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598731482139 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159461821075 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457866502577 0.0667264976115 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.38706741573 82% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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