It has been more than thirty thousand years since the man has been evolved from his ancestors. In this vast planet of Earth, man coevals with millions of other species too some of which might have been evolved before man himself. But, some activities of man due to his greediness and foolishness, those other species’ life gets endangered resulting in reduction of their numbers and eventually getting extinct from this Earth. Even though it is inveterate nature of earth where natural causes results in extinction of species, it is man who’s activities lead to this effect. Hence, I agree with the prompt that only if the potential extinction of other species is the result of human works, it has to be re thought by us.
‘Change is inevitable in nature’ is one of the famous sayings. Even before men arrived on this planet, dinosaurs were the one’s who went extinct because of the natural causes. That was a period which was inevitable by any of the living thing on this earth. But, contemporarily substantiating this, some bird species like sparrows are getting endangered due to the over usage of cell phones. There is also a famous saying by great thinkers that as soon as the number of sparrows get to null, than man too faces the same fate. Even though this is a conjecture, it makes us redoubt the quotidian works that we pursue which may hurt the kingdom of other species. Hence, if those are getting effected by manial works, then such activities has to be ended.
Nature comprises of the food chain and ecological pyramids to maintain it’s balance. If any one part of this chain ill-works, the balance of nature get’s disturbed leading to apocalypse eventually. Human, being the part of this food chain has to help nature to maintain this ecological balance inorder to survive on this planet peacefully. For example, if all the trees are killed by human are home to many carnivorous, they enter the cities and hence forth may feed on human too. Hence, it is viable to think that it is better to save other species by human only if human activities lead for their numbers get decrease.
In a nutshell, Man is the only animal who is called as a social animal. He is recogonised as the most intelligent of any living things in the world. But, man is said to be an offspring of evolution by nature. Hence, if man really is said to be the intelligent human being, if he really qualifies to get called so, then he will think of saving the animals’ number for his posterity which is getting reduced by his activities contemporarily.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, really, so, then, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2133.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 447.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77181208054 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6947235045 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48322147651 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4265672126 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.571428571 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128842907457 0.243740707755 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0424478297331 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496435800123 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0835484967552 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320663322153 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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