Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Arts has been a growing field in the past few years and attracts more people each year than the previous year. People from all over the world travel to different places just to witness the artistic brilliance exhibited by the artists in that place. Therefore, arts also play a significant role in the economic development of a region. Hence, I largely agree with the prompt and feel that government funding is required to ensure that arts can flourish and be open to all people. This is mainly because government funding ensures that everyone has a right to contribute to arts and it doesn't belong only to a specific group of aristocrats.
Firstly, the government funding could help preserve the unique piece of art which could draw in more art lovers from all across the world. For instance, the painting of Monalisa which was drawn by Leonardo Da Vinci in 16th century A.D is still a hotspot of tourist attraction. Thousands of tourists from different parts of the world visit the museum in Paris which is the home to the painting of Monalisa. This plays an important role in the economic development of Paris. Not only the government but also the local business people get benefitted from the plethora of tourists visiting the place. It is also a treat for art lovers to witness such a masterpiece in close proximity. This is possible only due to the setting up of the museum using government funding. If the government hasn't funded to preserve the artwork then an individual would claim the ownership and keep it locked in his house. Therefore, government funding is very crucial in preserving arts.
Secondly, the government funding could encourage more artists to come up with more unique pieces of art which could help flourish the arts in a particular place. Proper support from the government is important to make sure that the artists keep providing some masterpieces which could help improve the status of arts in a particular place. If government funding is not provided then only specific people who are interested in arts might support the artists. This could drastically decrease the number of artists in a place.
Hence governments must make sure they provide enough support not only to preserve the existing artworks but also to encourage more artists to keep contributing to the field of art.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 586, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...as a right to contribute to arts and it doesnt belong only to a specific group of aris...
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Line 3, column 234, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: D
... by Leonardo Da Vinci in 16th century A.D is still a hotspot of tourist attractio...
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Line 3, column 665, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'proximity'.
Suggestion: proximity
...lovers to witness such a masterpiece in close proximity. This is possible only due to the setti...
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Line 3, column 784, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...g government funding. If the government hasnt funded to preserve the artwork then an ...
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Line 3, column 965, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing is very crucial in preserving arts. Secondly, the government funding could e...
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Line 5, column 341, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e status of arts in a particular place. If government funding is not provided then...
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Line 5, column 525, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rease the number of artists in a place. Hence governments must make sure they pr...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...the number of artists in a place. Hence governments must make sure they provide...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1928.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 392.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91836734694 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6201053611 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474489795918 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0793984386 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.473684211 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6315789474 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05263157895 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377769257473 0.243740707755 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124096355145 0.0831039109588 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953458874608 0.0758088955206 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246080691545 0.150359130593 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0870402946729 0.0667264976115 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 586, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...as a right to contribute to arts and it doesnt belong only to a specific group of aris...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 234, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: D
... by Leonardo Da Vinci in 16th century A.D is still a hotspot of tourist attractio...
^
Line 3, column 665, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'proximity'.
Suggestion: proximity
...lovers to witness such a masterpiece in close proximity. This is possible only due to the setti...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 784, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...g government funding. If the government hasnt funded to preserve the artwork then an ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 965, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing is very crucial in preserving arts. Secondly, the government funding could e...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 341, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e status of arts in a particular place. If government funding is not provided then...
^^
Line 5, column 525, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rease the number of artists in a place. Hence governments must make sure they pr...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...the number of artists in a place. Hence governments must make sure they provide...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1928.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 392.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91836734694 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6201053611 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474489795918 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0793984386 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.473684211 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6315789474 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05263157895 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377769257473 0.243740707755 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124096355145 0.0831039109588 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953458874608 0.0758088955206 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246080691545 0.150359130593 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0870402946729 0.0667264976115 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.