Some people believe that success in creative fields, such as painting, fiction writing, and filmmaking, primarily requires hard work and perseverance. Others believe that such success mainly requires innate talents that cannot be learned.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented
Despite innate talents can shorten the way to success, without hard working, even a genius can lose the glow of his or her talent. Therefore, I believe that success in creative fields mainly require hard work and perseverance, and innate talent is just to make the whole process faster.
While people are reading biographies of most great artists, they may notice one common characteristic between these great artists, that is they all had innate talent when they were young. For example, in Mozart's story, he composed his first symphony when he was 8 years old. And the other instance is Saint Saëns- a French composer- who also created his first symphony when he was a teenager. It is true that all of these well-known artists have special talents that could make them famous during their early life time. With innate talents in their fields, it is easier for them to get familiar with their skills and fields. Like a music composer who has absolute hearing, it may be easier for him or her to understand the structure of music, and to compose their own music.
However, merely having innate talent cannot decide whether a person will succeed or not. To be successful in any given field, even genius have to work hard to achieve it. Like the instances above, Mozart had to start practicing playing piano for hours everyday since he was four years old to keep him being familiar with playing piano. Without regularly practice, the muscle memory may disappear along the time pass. And a person who dose not have outstanding innate quality can compensate it with diligent practice. A psychological study published in 1993 from psychologist K. Anders Ericsson found that the innate talent that most people believe that exists is just the result of more than 10 years of intense practice, and individual difference is not the decisive factor to make a person become expert in his or her field.
In conclusion, although innate talent may play a role that decide the learning process and duration of a person, individual differences cannot decide a person's success. But hard work and perseverance can decide if a person would succeed in his or her field. Therefore, I believe that hard work and perseverance play more decisive roles in deciding whether a person can be successful or not.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: lifetime
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Suggestion: every day
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Suggestion: persons'; person's
... individual differences cannot decide a persons success But hard work and perseverance ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1864.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 389.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79177377892 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43147711084 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480719794344 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.2370786517 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 389.0 23.0359550562 1689% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 60.3974514979 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1864.0 118.986275619 1567% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 389.0 23.4991977007 1655% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 102.0 5.21951772744 1954% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 10.2758426966 10% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237705958649 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.237705958649 0.0831039109588 286% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0758088955206 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177191049653 0.150359130593 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.096971404912 0.0667264976115 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 195.6 14.1392134831 1383% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -314.9 48.8420337079 -645% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.92365168539 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 153.8 12.1743820225 1263% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.98 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 26.02 8.38706741573 310% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 53.0 11.8971910112 445% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 157.6 11.2143820225 1405% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 158.0 11.7820224719 1341% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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