Education is important part of life which forms a factor on which one can be erudite, highly knowledgeable and decide the career. One should have the freedom to choose any field based on their choices, area of interest, economic factors and many more aspects as well as the wages. Education act as a criteria for various job's fields like research, exploration, innovation and many more. It must not create any instability on other fields like art, politics, economy, singing, acting and many more where getting a job is way more difficult than common fields.
First is the example of Elon Musk, who was talented in programming from his teenager, who brought revolution in the field of banking by making transaction through personal computer or cell phone via a platform called as PayPal. He is today helping other companies like Tesla, SpaceX, Neuralink and X (Twitter) to make the changes in them, so that user's life can be eased. If he would have pursued some other career we would have never seen such talented person.
Second is the example of Steve Jobs, the ex-CEO and Founder of Apple Computer's. He was way more good at marketing and product building and today Apple is known for its simple, sleek and beautiful design of computer's and mobile phones. If he would have pursued some other career option then we would have never seen Apple Company which was solely responsible for touch screen phones.
I do partially agree, with the statement but it is student's will whether they want to pursue courses other than curriculum. But it is also the duty of university to facilitate the courses, so that student's should generate interest. No matter other factors too influence the student's will and area of interest.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 292, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Education) must be used with a third-person verb: 'acts'.
Suggestion: acts
...aspects as well as the wages. Education act as a criteria for various jobs fields l...
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Line 1, column 299, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a criterion' or simply 'criteria'?
Suggestion: a criterion; criteria
... as well as the wages. Education act as a criteria for various jobs fields like research, ...
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Line 2, column 345, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'users'' or 'user's'?
Suggestion: users'; user's
...er to make the changes in them, so that users life can be eased. If he would have pur...
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Line 2, column 370, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... them, so that users life can be eased. If he would have pursued some other career...
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Line 2, column 376, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had pursued'?
Suggestion: had pursued
... so that users life can be eased. If he would have pursued some other career we would have never s...
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Line 3, column 241, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had pursued'?
Suggestion: had pursued
...n of computers and mobile phones. If he would have pursued some other career option then we would ...
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Line 4, column 256, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to influence'?
Suggestion: to influence
...erate interest. No matter other factors too influence the students will and area of interest....
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Line 4, column 274, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... matter other factors too influence the students will and area of interest.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 58.6224719101 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1426.0 2235.4752809 64% => OK
No of words: 292.0 442.535393258 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88356164384 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47627132696 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61301369863 0.4932671777 124% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 704.065955056 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9661099036 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.692307692 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4615384615 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30769230769 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202720321611 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723051619919 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573560336663 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122973077889 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0862559501657 0.0667264976115 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.