Some people claim that a nation's government should preserve its wilderness areas in their natural state. Others argue that these areas should be developed for potential economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Environment plays a vital role in people’s health. In other words, an unpolluted environment is crucial for the well being of not only the human being but also for the flora and fauna. The prompt claims two distinct views of the people, one suggest the conservation of wilderness area while the other one suggest its conversion for economic growth of the nation. In my opinion, depending on the type of the nation, the apt decision should be taken. Since most of the nations are under developing, I mostly agree for the conversion of the wilderness area for economic growth based on two reasons.
First of all, for the developed countries, the preservation of the wilderness area will be beneficial as it will not only help to control the pollution but it will also assist to protect the flora and fauna. On contrary, when considering the developing countries, they require funds to enhance the life of the hoi polloi. There are copious ways to improve the economy without affecting the wildlife. For example, if the wilderness area is just a dessert then using it for generating the electricity by the means of solar cells is an efficient way. In this case, the developing countries can gain economy without making any harm to the environment. Even the developed countries are using the desert for generating the electricity for their peoples. Apart from this benefit, government can also make some part of desert to generate the wind energy by the means of wind mills. It may be the added advantage to generate electricity without causing pollution as well as without harming wildlife.
Second of all, development of the wilderness area will result in people’s concern about the importance of wildlife. After sawing the development in the wilderness area, most of the people will get inspired to take care of various species living in there. In other words, after visiting the zoo, when peoples come home, they bring good vibes regarding the animal which they saw in zoo. This will result in positive attitude of the people towards the animals. For instance, when any angry men or women will meet the stubborn stray dog in his/her way, then instead of hitting the dog with the rock, as some peoples have propensity towards it, they may placate it and feed as they will be having the positive vibes regarding the animals. If the wilderness area left untreated then people’s interest in the life of flora and fauna will keeps on decreasing and eventually die after a long period of time. Albeit, it is true that humans have done the deleterious effect to the environment and most of the factories which release toxin in the ocean have affected the aquatic life, as well as with the toxin gases, factories are responsible for polluting the air, and so the wilderness area should not use for the factories but instead as discussed above, it may be use for the some beneficial activity.
After analyzing both the claims, it can be inferred that for the developing countries, the wilderness area could be used for the betterment of the society in a way which does not affect the flora and fauna. For the developed countries, wilderness area can be preserved as there is no surplus need for the money as compare to what the developing countries have.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...erness area left untreated then people’s interest in the life of flora and fauna ...
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Suggestion: keep
...est in the life of flora and fauna will keeps on decreasing and eventually die after ...
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Suggestion: period
...reasing and eventually die after a long period of time. Albeit, it is true that humans have do...
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... discussed above, it may be use for the some beneficial activity. After analyzi...
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...e use for the some beneficial activity. After analyzing both the claims, it can ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, regarding, second, so, then, well, while, apart from, for example, for instance, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, in other words, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2706.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 557.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85816876122 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61382602431 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452423698384 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 853.2 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.10617977528 354% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.3634673874 60.3974514979 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.0 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3181818182 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.95454545455 5.21951772744 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318412525852 0.243740707755 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932015191242 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565604465762 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206219723479 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417171573483 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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