Some people claim that you can tell whether a nation is great by looking at the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists. Others argue that the surest indicator of a great nation is, in fact, the general welfare of all its people.Write a respons

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Some people claim that you can tell whether a nation is great by looking at the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists. Others argue that the surest indicator of a great nation is, in fact, the general welfare of all its people.

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

What is the most ideal and effective standard to evaluate the greatness of a nation? Some may argue that it is achievements made by individual experts, such as rulers, artists, or scientists, as the statement contends, while others argue that it should be the general welfare of the populace. I believe that a nation should be assessed based on the general well-being of is people for the following reasons.

Firstly, though individuals can contribute to a nation by their achievements, it may not successfully improve the greatness of the country. To say a nation is great, the people living in the country should be at least provided by decent welfare system, which enables them to maintain healthy and safe daily life as well as to be educated as much as they wish. Unfortunately, achievements of individual specialists are not always relevant to the welfare of the public. In Olympic, for example, where individuals participate representing one’s nation, winning a medal could be such a fame of not only for the player but also for the country. Such amazing achievement, however, cannot feed children suffer from famine, provide education for illiterate people, or help people who lost their houses from flood. If a nation cannot take care of the most basic needs of its citizenry, however great achievements individuals made, it cannot be considered great.

Secondly, although the achievements are relevant to the welfare issue of the public, the government may fail to distribute the benefit of the achievements. When public system is corrupted, it becomes very difficult to reach and provide support to the mid and lower class people. For example, Korea is known for its advanced Information Technology, which was led by a few renowned scientists back in 1990s. However, because of the corrupted system, the e-governance system, which was established by those skillful scientists to benefit the public, is failing to serve the public, after consuming the uncountable research and development funding. As this shows, a nation cannot become great only with the achievements of its experts, but it requires a prudent system, which can distribute the benefit.

Nevertheless, some may still argue that it is still possible to properly evaluate whether a nation is praiseworthy based on the outcome of a few specialists. However, when we think about what would require a nation to serve its people adequately, it would be too naïve to say that the individual’s achievements are enough. To assess a nation, more holistic and comprehensive approach is required, which includes well-being of public in education, medical services, security, and political and religious freedom.

In conclusion, while accomplishments of individual experts in diverse fields may contribute to the greatness of a nation, there are other more critical factors that can tell us about the nation. Thus, it is also vital to consider a nation as a whole, especially focusing on the well-being of its citizenry when discussing about how great a nation is.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
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Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1990s'.
Suggestion: in the 1990s
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Discourse Markers used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.20390070922 0.240241500013 85% => OK
Verbs: 0.152482269504 0.157235817809 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0904255319149 0.0880659088768 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.063829787234 0.0497285424764 128% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0372340425532 0.0444667217837 84% => OK
Prepositions: 0.11524822695 0.12292977631 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0354609929078 0.0406280797675 87% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.04772504225 2.79330140395 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.031914893617 0.030933414821 103% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.101063829787 0.0997080785238 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.031914893617 0.0249443105267 128% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0248226950355 0.0148568991511 167% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3050.0 2732.02544248 112% => OK
No of words: 489.0 452.878318584 108% => OK
Chars per words: 6.23721881391 6.0361032391 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.58838876751 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.411042944785 0.366273622748 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.327198364008 0.280924506359 116% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.229038854806 0.200843997647 114% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.147239263804 0.132149295362 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04772504225 2.79330140395 109% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 219.290929204 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498977505112 0.48968727796 102% => OK
Word variations: 58.1990386771 55.4138127331 105% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6194690265 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.7368421053 23.380412469 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4459904649 59.4972553346 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.526315789 141.124799967 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7368421053 23.380412469 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.10526315789 0.674092028746 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 58.4566785061 51.4728631049 114% => OK
Elegance: 1.3986013986 1.64882698954 85% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.510225592824 0.391690518653 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.103362634297 0.123202303941 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0489038389991 0.077325440228 63% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.562799830278 0.547984918172 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.145319669834 0.149214159877 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.215426837582 0.161403998019 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844352737161 0.0892212321368 95% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.433934532277 0.385218514788 113% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0672391485563 0.0692045440612 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.366295938986 0.275328986314 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065646060035 0.0653680567796 100% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.5995575221 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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based on the general well-being of is people for the following reasons.
based on the general well-being of its people for the following reasons.

flaws:
The fourth paragraph is not developed well:
Nevertheless, some may still argue that it is still possible to properly evaluate whether a nation is praiseworthy based on the outcome of a few specialists.

Suggested:
Nevertheless, When people trace back the important historical improvement or comment on today's the development of a nation, they often resort to those who are representative and prompting ones for the reason that the roles they played are irreplaceable in such processes. The artists in the Renaissance, such as Vince, Michelangelo etc., were the forerunners of some artistic schools, many of their artworks were today’s classics that constitute the important part of cultural legacies through which a nation defines its cultural identity. When talking about the today’s advanced economic situations that American achieved, the contributions of Clinton and Bush can not be denied. However, ....more arguments here...

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 489 350
No. of Characters: 2472 1500
No. of Different Words: 230 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.702 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.055 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.898 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 193 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 141 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.737 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.447 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.553 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

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