Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them.in return for the millions of dollars that they are paid we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.
The statement argue since sports and movie stars earn multiple of dollar owning to their fame, they should be returning back to the society by bring role models for younger people. I agree with the opinion.
The celebrities turn into millionaires, or even billionaires, over short period of time as result of their fan following. movie starts are offered bigger and meaty roles based on their fan base, and same is the case with sport man who is offered more matches for similar reason. Moreover, in addition to their core work, they are often hired for commercials, ramp-walks, promotion activities which provide them secondary yet comparable source of income. these all are dependent on how well the celebrity is perceived by the society, how many people are following her on social networking sites. In short, they become brands owning to their fan club. The fans can surely make or break them.
fans love the favorite celebrity and follow them closely. What the celebrity opts to wears become trendy. The shades a popular Bollywood actor wore his blockbuster movie became readily available in the market. some years back, the hairstyle adopted by the same famous person became so popular that every boy got the same haircut. Similarly, sales of a shampoo increased to drastically after a famous cricket player appeared in it advertisement. The fans so blind copy the style of these people that they do anything they appear to be doing.
The celebrities reach pinnacle of their career because of the affection of these people. Therefore, in return of these value the receive from society, they act as role models for their young followers. if they are following them in all fashion, certainly they will walk the path of good conduct lead by the stars. if the a famous actor could put on some post requesting his fans not to do drugs, they may take seriously. if an actress post on some picture on her Instagram planting trees, teenagers will get indulged in this environment-friendly activity. if a sport man will a disorder or special medical condition such as diabetes presents his case an example, other suffering for the same issue with be encouraged.
fans play major part in building the career of the film and sport fraternity. The fame and wealth the acquire is all owed to the society that showers their love to them. In return, since they so influential, they can articulated important messages to their fans for individual and collectivity benefit of the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'returning'.
Suggestion: returning
...ar owning to their fame, they should be returning back to the society by bring role models for...
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Line 4, column 74, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...aires, or even billionaires, over short period of time as result of their fan following. movie...
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Line 4, column 123, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Movie
... time as result of their fan following. movie starts are offered bigger and meaty rol...
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Line 4, column 455, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: These
...ondary yet comparable source of income. these all are dependent on how well the celeb...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Fans
...ans can surely make or break them. fans love the favorite celebrity and follow ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...became readily available in the market. some years back, the hairstyle adopted by th...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...le. Therefore, in return of these value the receive from society, they act as role models f...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... role models for their young followers. if they are following them in all fashion,...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...path of good conduct lead by the stars. if the a famous actor could put on some po...
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Line 10, column 318, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
...h of good conduct lead by the stars. if the a famous actor could put on some post req...
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Line 10, column 422, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...t to do drugs, they may take seriously. if an actress post on some picture on her ...
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Line 10, column 422, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t to do drugs, they may take seriously. if an actress post on some picture on her ...
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Line 10, column 557, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... in this environment-friendly activity. if a sport man will a disorder or special ...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... in this environment-friendly activity. if a sport man will a disorder or special ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Fans
...he same issue with be encouraged. fans play major part in building the career ...
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Line 13, column 99, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...d sport fraternity. The fame and wealth the acquire is all owed to the society that showers...
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Line 13, column 218, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'articulate'
Suggestion: articulate
...rn, since they so influential, they can articulated important messages to their fans for in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, moreover, second, similarly, so, therefore, well, in addition, in short, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2084.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 418.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98564593301 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65443316549 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569377990431 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1764678742 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6086956522 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1739130435 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86956521739 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226295619209 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580388135043 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612999560085 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138442958909 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586190280572 0.0667264976115 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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