Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility
The issue states that the sports star and movie stars should fulfill their responsibility of being role models for the young people who look up to them. Although, hastily one might see this as a fair statement. This has many flaws as we dive deeper in the issue.
All people have their right to live freely without bondage from anybody else. Why should this not be the case for the sports stars and the movie stars? They should not be exceptions to this liberty. These stars, whatever they do, they do it for themselves. Sachin Tendulkar plays cricket because he likes the game or Amitabh Bachhan acts because he enjoys doing this job. And no were in their job agreements it is mentioned that they also have an extra responsibility of being a role model to the young people.
They are paid for doing their jobs and not for being role models. It's because of their talents and their skills that they have reached such great heights. Amitabh Bachhan struggled a lot in his early carrier. But he did not give up and because of his own perseverance he is a super star. Sachin gave hours and hours of practice in cricket. And evidently his hardwork repayed. These stars are paid for providing entertainment to the people and they are bound to do nothing more than that.
On the contrary the onus should be on the young people. They are responsible for who they look up to as their role models and what all do they inculcate from them. It's on their part to imbibe the good qualities and leave the ones that are not required. Seeing a movie star smoking or bunking a class or disrespecting elders in a scene should not be taken as a motivation for doing the same. The movie stars are bound by the scripts on which they are acting. The young minds should rather learn from the hardwork and the sincerity by which they movie stars and sports star do they job. The determination of these stars should inspire them to be a better human.
As every coin has two sides, this issue is also no exception to it. Although, the stars are not legaly bound to any contract of being role models. They are very much aware of the their fame and also the fact that how many people closely follow them. So they should be prudent in what they are showcasing. Otherwise it might be possible that some fan without giving much thought, might just blindly follow the star and end up learning a bad quality.
So from the above arguements it is clear that these stars have their own personal life and imposing a restriction of their life is not the best solution to the issue.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
The issue states that the sports star and movie stars should fulfill the...
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Line 3, column 377, Rule ID: NOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...s because he enjoys doing this job. And no were in their job agreements it is ment...
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Line 5, column 67, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...eir jobs and not for being role models. Its because of their talents and their skil...
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Line 7, column 335, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...class or disrespecting elders in a scene should not be taken as a motivation for ...
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Line 7, column 587, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ovie stars and sports star do they job. The determination of these stars should ins...
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Line 9, column 69, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... this issue is also no exception to it. Although, the stars are not legaly bound to any ...
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Line 9, column 176, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'their'?
Suggestion: the; their
...ole models. They are very much aware of the their fame and also the fact that how many pe...
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Line 9, column 306, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
...be prudent in what they are showcasing. Otherwise it might be possible that some fan with...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.224 0.240241500013 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.164 0.157235817809 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.062 0.0880659088768 70% => OK
Adverbs: 0.044 0.0497285424764 88% => OK
Pronouns: 0.094 0.0444667217837 211% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.108 0.12292977631 88% => OK
Participles: 0.048 0.0406280797675 118% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.27157860797 2.79330140395 81% => OK
Infinitives: 0.024 0.030933414821 78% => OK
Particles: 0.006 0.0016655270985 360% => OK
Determiners: 0.116 0.0997080785238 116% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.022 0.0249443105267 88% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.02 0.0148568991511 135% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2555.0 2732.02544248 94% => OK
No of words: 465.0 452.878318584 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49462365591 6.0361032391 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.58838876751 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.247311827957 0.366273622748 68% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.163440860215 0.280924506359 58% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0989247311828 0.200843997647 49% => More words length more than 7 chars wanted.
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0602150537634 0.132149295362 46% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.27157860797 2.79330140395 81% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 219.290929204 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447311827957 0.48968727796 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.90008543 55.4138127331 90% => OK
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6194690265 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0344827586 23.380412469 69% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3549354765 59.4972553346 59% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1034482759 141.124799967 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0344827586 23.380412469 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.206896551724 0.674092028746 31% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.21349557522 153% => OK
Readability: 32.3785687801 51.4728631049 63% => OK
Elegance: 1.2582781457 1.64882698954 76% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.557564610306 0.391690518653 142% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0789329525621 0.123202303941 64% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0820381501054 0.077325440228 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.458429193329 0.547984918172 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.15084869406 0.149214159877 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179226925425 0.161403998019 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121599861931 0.0892212321368 136% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.349962546971 0.385218514788 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.05183227428 0.0692045440612 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.360882441066 0.275328986314 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103299226451 0.0653680567796 158% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.4325221239 125% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88274336283 225% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.5995575221 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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