The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Instead of comparing the two indicators about which is better. I think both of them are good indicators for a nation. While the general welfare of its people is indisputable the most important indicator of a great nation, its rulers, artists, or scientists can provide a higher level achievement that represents the power of a nation.
For each country, the people’s life quality, economic stability, environmental status should be put in the first place of the country’s missions. If the governments do not provide the general welfare to people, the country will not be stable to live. After the general welfare is provided well, the next step of the government is to improve its development in higher-level areas, such as art, science, technology… etc. That is an ideal model for any good government that takes its people into the first concerned welfare.
If any government does not take this order of achievements of the country into account, it will be a tragedy for the people in the country. For example, the North Korea communist government does not put the general welfare of its people in the first place. Instead, the government is proud of the unclear weapon produced by their national weapon institution. They shoot the weapon experimentally several times to present the power of their nation, while lots of people in their country are suffering from hunger and poverty. It is such a shame for the government.
To sum up, people’s general welfare should be treated as the first mission of a country, when the stability and prosperity are pervaded in the whole country, it is the time that the government can pursue the higher-level achievement of its rulers, artists, or scientists. That will be the best strategy for all humankind.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, well, while, for example, i think, such as, to sum up, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 58.6224719101 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1489.0 2235.4752809 67% => OK
No of words: 292.0 442.535393258 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09931506849 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93758172251 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 215.323595506 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 704.065955056 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.2986858011 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.357142857 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8571428571 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320715993446 0.243740707755 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107649274806 0.0831039109588 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133220406321 0.0758088955206 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226692421453 0.150359130593 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138531722927 0.0667264976115 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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