Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Young people usually like to get famous quickly, but they should be encouraged to set up realistic goals. It is important for young people to have long-term educational plans to get good jobs and make their own lives.
Long-term goals can be frastrating sometimes; however, the result will be worthen. For example, a young girl who wants to be a dietitian should study for four years to get a clinical nutrition bachelor. In addition, she should pass a ten months dietetic internship and the registered dietitian exam after that to be able to work as a dietitian. It is obivious that she is going to have tight schedules. Moreover, she should studey hard to reach her dreams. Consequently, she will become a RD.
Additionally, young people are usually passioned about trips and vacations which is good but only sometimes because they need to save some money for their future plans too. Imagine a same RD girl who has a full time job; however, she goes to expensive travels with her friends every year. As a result, she is going to have money problems soon. Instead of spending unnecessary money, she can make a money plan to make sure that she can be an independent person in her life.
On the contrary, most young people believe that they only born one time, so they should enjoy their lives and get things immedietly; however, most of the time fame and success come quickly and dissepear quickly too. For example, consider a young girl who likes to get famous among her friends by going to parties and dancing on the floor. As a result, she might get happy and success, but everybody is going to forget her sooner or later which is not going to bring her realistic goal.
Long-term goals are beneficial because young people can stay on track and become successful persons one day. Immediate recognition is every young's dream; however, quick fame will vanish soon. To make a progress in our lives we need to have goals even if reaching them is going to take a long time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...s too. Imagine a same RD girl who has a full time job; however, she goes to expensive tra...
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Line 5, column 201, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'progress'.
Suggestion: progress
...r, quick fame will vanish soon. To make a progress in our lives we need to have goals even...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, moreover, so, then, for example, in addition, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1628.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 348.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67816091954 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46971349358 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525862068966 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 704.065955056 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.520110294 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4444444444 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191037294015 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649497739476 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487028921062 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123259473867 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413160711169 0.0667264976115 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 100.480337079 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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