Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The recommendation presents a view that I would agree is successful most of the time. Young people usually like to get famous immediately, but they should be encouraged to set up realistic goals because it is important for young individuals to have long-term educational plans to have good jobs and consequently good lives in the future.
Long-term goals can be frustrating sometimes; however, the consequence will be worthy. For example, a young girl who wants to be a dietitian should study for four years to get a clinical nutrition bachelor. In addition, she should pass a ten months dietetic internship and the registered dietitian exam after that. It is obvious that she is going to have tight schedules. Moreover, she should study hard to reach her dreams. Consequently, she will become a RD even if the educational path was not that fun for her.
Additionally, young people are passionate about vacations that is not good all the times because they need to save money for unexpected expenses too. Imagine a same RD girl who has a fulltime job; however, she goes to expensive travels with her friends every year. As a result, she is going to have money problems soon. Instead of spending unnecessary money, she can save money to make sure that she can be an independent individual in her life that is more important than having entertainment.
In contrast to the statement, most young individuals believe that they only born one time, so they should enjoy their moments; however, most of the time fame and recognition come quickly and disappear quickly too. For instance, consider a young girl who likes to get famous among her friends by going to parties and dancing on the floor. As a result, she might get happy which is a good entertainment for her and her friends. Whatever the reason behind the behavior, the key factor is that short-term goals are not beneficial for her.
In conclusion, immediate recognition is every young individual’s dream, but to make improvements in their lives it is important to have long-term goals to become successful persons one day.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 351.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93447293447 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87055099005 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524216524217 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5480402452 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.882352941 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6470588235 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.29411764706 5.21951772744 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199096332887 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634397106367 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485946161609 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122310414283 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433585754509 0.0667264976115 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 100.480337079 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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