Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Young people are the future of every country. A country's growth is largely dependent upon the quality of education, availability of jobs, and happiness index of its people. However, in our today's semiconductor-based life, it has become very easy to showcase your talent and follow a trend. A lot of people get influences from these social media trends and start seeking immediate fame and recognition. I mostly agree with the author that young people should be encouraged to pursue long term, more realistic goals rather than immediate fame and recognition. The following are the main ideas behind my thesis.
Firstly, the fame and recognition are ephemeral in nature. In other words, time is ever-changing; there was a time when colorful clothes were in fashion and now most of the expensive brands in the world promote bald clothing. A person who is popular now, may not be popular after some year. Let's take an example of TikTok, it is a popular media app where people can just use their mobile phones to create creative videos and publish them online. Today, there are millions of young people who left their school just because they became popular and now want to pursue their career in show business. However, this fame is really temporary, and very few people actually succeed in life ahead. Therefore, young people should always set long-term goals, it can be either acting, dancing, singing, or even medical. But this goal should not be set on the basis of immediate trends and one should really pursue his or her own interests.
Secondly, the path after immediate fame and recognition is not defined and often a conundrum. People seek immediate fame based on the trends to get attention from people around but the path ahead is really tedious and unpropitious. For instance, in today's world of technology, it is very easy to showcase your talent on platforms like YouTube, Instagram, and Snapchat and you can even get big fame and recognition easily but the afterlife becomes really difficult. It is possible that a model who is very popular on Instagram finds it very difficult to get a proper modeling job in the fashion industry. Hence, we should always set for long-term goals and should avoid taking shortcuts to reach our goal.
Lastly, what if a person does not know about his or her interests? Even, what if a person is good at acting or singing but is unaware of it. In that case, following a trend and seeking fame can serve as an epiphany. However, one should still follow a proper path to fame and should avoid taking shortcuts.
To sum up, seeking long term goals provide stability in life, and fame and recognition are really temporary and one should always take their action to make their future prosperous.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for instance, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 14.8657303371 209% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2278.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 467.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87794432548 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56879180938 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51391862955 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 720.0 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.043015706 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9166666667 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4583333333 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.29166666667 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28350539038 0.243740707755 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785010903724 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0894268250017 0.0758088955206 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158353815043 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064381062653 0.0667264976115 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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