The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph shows the number of population who aged 65 and older in a 100-year period from 1994 to 2040 in three developed countries.
In general, all of the groups of people have increased in the end of period.
Sweden and USA have increased the percentage of their population I the first forty-year. Then, they increased steadily in the next twenty-year. However, USA had level-off in the next 20-year while Sweden has increased and fluctuated until the end of period. USA has increased as well.
On the other hand, Japan has distinctive graph than two other countries. It has started with decreasing percentage in the first 20-year. Then, it leveled-off in the next twenty-year. However, it has showed the same ending with the sharply increase.
Overall, japan has showed the slowest population’s proportion aged 65 up in the first period, but it has been the highest in the end of period.
Sentence: Sweden and USA have increased the percentage of their population I the first forty-year.
Description: The tag a pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by the
Suggestion: Refer to I and the
Sentence: Then, it leveled-off in the next twenty-year.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to it and leveled-off
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