It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together. Include any relevant examples from your experience.
Nowadays families are not as close as before and in many cases there is cold relation between family members. Rate of divorce is increasing and in general families are not as happy as they used to be.
In last twenty years by developing economy and technology in many countries relations in families have been affected dramatically, parents are working outside for long hours, children spend most of their time with smart phones and laptops, consequently no time left for family members to spend time with each other and due to this situations members of families are more vulnerable than ever. Teenagers like to be left alone and don’t want their parents to get involved with their problems. According to latest research most teenagers spent three hours per day on Facebook and Twitter. Therefore in this situation family members will have less time to be around each other and communicate with one another.
However, this situation can be change. As we all know, family is the most important unit in society, therefore to save our society every individual must give effort to improve the quality of relationships inside his or her family. Family members must come closer to one another, they need to spend more time with each other and for this purpose parents have the main role, after all they are the head of family, therefore they have more responsibility.
In conclusion, I personally believe we people need to focus more on family, we must believe that family is everything and work, friends and all other things comes next.
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Sentence: In last twenty years by developing economy and technology in many countries relations in families have been affected dramatically, parents are working outside for long hours, children spend most of their time with smart phones and laptops, consequently no time left for family members to spend time with each other and due to this situations members of families are more vulnerable than ever.
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Sentence: In conclusion, I personally believe we people need to focus more on family, we must believe that family is everything and work, friends and all other things comes next.
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However, this situation can be change.
However, this situation can be changed.
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