There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
Recently, there are many several styles of music influence in the world. Listening music obtain inspirations that are creative, innovative, and imaginative. Some people believe that traditional music Indonesia has typical which unique, artistic, and motivation. However, other people prefer that traditional music in Indonesia is vital, it cannot be ignored compared to international music in each country.
Generally, some people think that traditional music Indonesia has many cultures and identities of the people as every province start from Sabang to Merauke has its own traditional music with their instruments and histories. For example, West Java province of Bandung has music traditional such as gamelan angklung. It is a musical instrument made of two bamboo tubes attached to a bamboo frame. The tubes are carves to have a resonant pitch when struck and tuned to octaves.
Gamelan angklung heard in Balinese temple, where it supplies musical accompaniment to temple anniversaries. It is also characteristic of rituals related to death, and therefore connected in Balinese culture to the invisible spiritual realm and transitions from life to death and beyond. Because of its portability, gamelan angklung refer to be and carry in processions while a funeral bier is carried from temporary burial in a cemetery to the cremation site. The musicians often playing music to accompany the cremation ceremony, thus, many Balinese listeners associate angklung music with strong emotions evoking a combination of sacred sweetness and sadness.
Although traditional refer to music and Indonesia must be preserve and important to children, so that cannot destroy and totally disappeared. It makes societies proud of some achievement acquired by young people. For instance, angklung received the award of Museum Record of Indonesian, and then it has recognized by UNESCO as Indonesia’s culture heritage in 2010.
Some another opinion, there are those who do not appreciation of the nation's children, that many people are intentionally unconscious traditional music which was then claimed by its neighbors so that they too late to protect their prior culture to be recognized by other countries.
To sum up, Music of traditional Indonesia is a symbol each country. It is shows history, belief and customary of nations. On other hand, Government must be aware, care of conserve, and good response so that keep opposite.
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