The charts below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, an make comparisions where relevant.

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The charts below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, an make comparisions where relevant.

The charts show information about populations changing in Yemen and Italy in the year of 2000 and projections for 2050. The information given shows about the ages of populations between each countries.

From 2000 to 2050, Yemen was predicted that there would be decreasing in ages of population between 0-14 years from 50.1% to 37.0% while Italy was also predicted dropping from 14.3% to 11.5%. On the other hand, the percentage of population ages 15-19 years would dramatically increase from 46.3% to 57.3% in Yemen when Italy was predicted different which decreasing from 61.6% to 46.2%. For the last category, means population on ages in year above 60, Yemen was predicted would face with increasing from 3.6% to 5.7% and Italy would rose dramatically from 61.6% to 46.2%

Overall, this represents that the populations ages between 15 to 59 years would still be the biggest populations in both Yemen and Italy.

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Sentence: The information given shows about the ages of populations between each countries.
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Sentence: On the other hand, the percentage of population ages 15-19 years would dramatically increase from 46.3 to 57.3 in Yemen when Italy was predicted different which decreasing from 61.6 to 46.2.
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Suggestion: Refer to which and decreasing

Yemen was predicted would face with increasing from 3.6% to 5.7%
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