The charts below show the number of Japanese tourist travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.
Write a report a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The bar chart illustrates how many Japanese traveler visiting oversea over 1985 and 1995 period. Then, there are line graph that it was provided by Australia of a percentage data about Japan's tourist coming.
First, the prominent feature base on data which was the highest number of vacationists in 1995 year, contrast with the lowest Japanese vacationists went to abroad in 1985 year. Whereas, Australia was visited the largest by Japan's vacationers in 1993.
In 1985, only five millions Japan's tourits went to oversea, then moving increased slightly until 1990, it was at 11 millions traveller. At the same as, between 1991 to 1995, it rose gradually for Japan's vacationists vacation. In 1992 and 1993, had almost similarity he number of traveller average 12 millions tourist.
Likewise, in one decade, Australia became one of country was tended by Japanese vacationist. Where the maximum traveller coming from Japan with more than six millions traveller in 1993. Then, the minimum Japan's visitor in 1985, at two millions. From 1985 to 1993, it rose gradually with a spike almost five millions in 1988 and with a slight dip in 1989, at 4,1 millions visitor.
how many Japanese traveler visiting oversea over 1985 and 1995 period
Description: what is the verb for this sentence?
there are line graph that it was provided by Australia
there is a line graph that was provided by Australia
the prominent feature base on data
the prominent feature is based on data
In 1992 and 1993, had almost
In 1992 and 1993, it had almost
Australia became one of country was tended by Japanese vacationist
Australia became one of the country which was tended by Japanese vacationist
Sentence: In 1985, only five millions Japan's tourits went to oversea, then moving increased slightly until 1990, it was at 11 millions traveller.
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