The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.
The bar graphs elucidate the information on the percentage of computer ownership compared to the level of education between 2002 and 2010.
According to the first graph, initially, more than 50% people owned computers and this percentage kept on increasing over years. Over 70% of people would hold of computers by 2010 compared to those of in 2002.
As it can be observed from the second graph, the trend of the percentage of computer ownership increased with the education level regardless with the years of the survey; the higher education levels the higher percentage of computer ownership. About 15% of the people who had high school graduation had a computer in 2002 whereas about 60% for those who held of bachelor degrees and over 80% for the postgraduate degree holders. After 8 years, in 2010, the percentage of people who owned computers increased significantly compared to the 2002.
It is apparent that, the computer ownership increased over the years and this ownership among people with the higher education levels compared to the lower education levels.
and this ownership among people with the higher education levels compared to the lower education levels.
and this ownership ...is compared to the lower education levels??? can you re-write this sentence?
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A: As it can be observed from the second graph, the trend of the percentage of computer ownership increased with the education level regardless with the years of the survey.
B:It is apparent that, the computer ownership increased over the years and this ownership among people with the higher education levels compared to the lower education levels.
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