Hydro-electric power generation.
Alternative energy resource is needed as the demand of electricity. There is a new technology for electricity called Hydro-electric generation. This technology use water as the natural resource. It gives us beneficial effect to our daily life.
It takes a long a step to produce an electric power. Firstly, naturally, the sea water is heated by the sun until it becomes evaporate. Evaporation is needed to form the clouds as the main reason to produce rain. Continuing the step, rain fall down into the reservoir as it is collected in the dams.
The next step is letting the water enter the turbine. But water entry must be setting, so we use valve to control the amount. Then, the water will generate the turbine and produce electric power, while the water is pumped up from the turbine to the reservoir again.
When the electric power is produced, it will be transmitted to transformer station through the high voltage cables. Furthermore, by installing underground cables, the transformer station send out the power to houses, industries, school, hospitals and many public facilities. These are the most consumer of hydro-electric power.
In conclusion, there are several steps to produce hydro-electric power generation. From the sea water transforms into hydro-electric. It used for several purposes in different places.
Sentence: It takes a long a step to produce an electric power.
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Sentence: Continuing the step, rain fall down into the reservoir as it is collected in the dams.
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Sentence: Furthermore, by installing underground cables, the transformer station send out the power to houses, industries, school, hospitals and many public facilities.
Description: The fragment station send out is rare
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Sentence: These are the most consumer of hydro-electric power.
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
The first paragraph could be removed. This is IELTS talk I not task II.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 10
No. of Words: 213 200
No. of Characters: 1079 1000
No. of Different Words: 123 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.82 4.0
Average Word Length: 5.066 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.914 2.4
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No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 59 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 40 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
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Sentence Length SD: 4.729 7.5
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Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.582 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4