The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart shows the proportion of Australian men and women in different age groups who played sports regularly in 2010. Overall, it is obvious that the percentage of women doing activities was always larger than that of men in any age group except the one from 15 to 24.
Starting with the people of 35 to 44 years of age, the most significant difference can be seen, and 52.5% women but 39.5% men did exercise regularly. It was followed by that in the age group of 45 to 54(53.3% versus 43.1%), of 55 to 64 (53% against 45.1%) and of 25 to 34 (48.9% and 42.2%). However, it can be seen in the proportion of old people(65 and over) that the gap was the least obvious, and the figures for both genders were nearly the same, 47.1% for women and 46.7% for men.
Turning now to the group of 15 to 24, however, there were more boys than girls. Compared with 47.7% women, 52.8% men played sports very often.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 732.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 170.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.30588235294 4.92477711251 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20100637567 2.65546596893 83% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611764705882 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 197.1 283.868780488 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1130844657 43.030603864 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.571428571 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2857142857 22.9334400587 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.28571428571 5.23603664747 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365878171871 0.215688989381 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17078940021 0.103423049105 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.186476615878 0.0843802449381 221% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252500953772 0.15604864568 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.198259429757 0.0819641961636 242% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.2329268293 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.96 61.2550243902 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.01 11.4140731707 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 40.7170731707 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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