The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart illustrates the frequency of exercise proportion in various age groups of both gender in Australia by 2010.
it can be clearly seen that except the youngest group, the proportion of female, who did adequate exercises, was also larger than male. Overall, the exercise percentages of male and female were almost the same at 65 years old or above.
Between 15 and 24 years old, it was the only trend that 52.8% of male was motivated on regular exercise, which was higher than female at 47.7%. Then, the sufficient exercise proportion of male from 25 to 34 was declined to 42.2%, as well as an increase was displayed on female at 48.9% slightly. also, there was the lowest percentage of 35 to 44 in male at 39.5%, whereas 52.5% was indicated on female.
Turned to the ages between 45 to 54, 53.3% was the highest percentage over the charts that was recorded on women, as well as a soft raising was obtained from male at 43.1%. Moreover, 45.1% of men from 55 to 64, did an exercise regularly while 53% of women also believed of it. Finally, for the elder people, who were over 65 years old, there was a balanced proportion at 46.7% and 47.1% for male and female, separately.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: It
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, moreover, so, then, well, whereas, while, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 976.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 213.0 196.424390244 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58215962441 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45984301484 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 106.607317073 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582159624413 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 291.6 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.3084523428 43.030603864 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 108.444444444 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 5.23603664747 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140915539845 0.215688989381 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730455086201 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632040518491 0.0843802449381 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115490424079 0.15604864568 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659268061031 0.0819641961636 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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