The bar chart below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over of three countries in 1980 and 2000 and prediction in 2030

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The bar chart below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over of three countries in 1980 and 2000 and prediction in 2030

The given bar chart covers the percentage of people who are 65 years old and older across three nations in the past and future forecast.
As can be seen from the chart, the data started in 1980. This year experienced the proportion of the population aged 65 and over of Canada at 10%, which is the lowest. The percentage of the old generation in the UK was 4% higher than in Canada. Among three countries in 1980, Germany had the highest figure at 15%.
Twenty years later, Germany still remained at the first position with 20% population aged 65 and over. In the same year, the UK and Canada witnessed the similarity in the percentage of older people, which is 15%.
In the future, the proportion of the old generation is predicted to significantly mount up. Germany will hit 25% population aged 65 and over by 2030. Simultaneously, this proportion in Canada is forecasted to increase by 7% in comparison to its data in 2000. Lastly, the UK will undergo the same upward trend since the percentage of older people is expected to rise to 18%.
In conclusion, the overall tendency of the population aged 65 and over was upward among three countries from 1980 to 2000 and this trend is forecasted to unchange by 2030.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, lastly, so, still, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1003.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 216.0 196.424390244 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64351851852 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64360770427 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486111111111 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 304.2 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.0740246236 43.030603864 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5833333333 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58333333333 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379511996826 0.215688989381 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132649996891 0.103423049105 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106548094811 0.0843802449381 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215488348561 0.15604864568 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0859038325787 0.0819641961636 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.2329268293 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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