the bar chart show the distribution of employment among agriculture services and industries in three countries in 1980 and projected distribution in 2020

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the bar chart show the distribution of employment among agriculture, services and industries in three countries in 1980 and projected distribution in 2020

The bar chart compares different countries in terms of their employment rate among agriculture, services and industries from 1980 and the estimated figures until 2020

Overall, the minority of job in agriculture is found in country A and C while country B makes up the highest figure in agriculture . The amount of job in services in all countries increase

In 1980, about two-thirds of agriculture employment were from country B. Nearly 40% of industry job went to country C whereas the figures for country A and B were slightly lower. Regarding services, country C accounted for around seven in ten of job, which was twice times as much as that of country B
In 2020, all countries are predicted to slowly rise in the amount of employment in services . By 2020, the propotion of agriculture job in country A and C will have remained unchanged, at roughtly 20% and just 5% respectively while country B is estimated to decrese by roughly 10% . The amount of industry job in country B is projected to grow to approximately 40% compared to 22% in country B. The figure for country A will decline from 30 to just over 20% in 2020

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Average: 6.7 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...agriculture is found in country A and C while country B makes up the highest...
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...ture is found in country A and C while country B makes up the highest figure...
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...nd in country A and C while country B makes up the highest figure in agricul...
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...o-thirds of agriculture employment were from country B. Nearly 40% of industry ...
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...hat of country B In 2020, all countries are predicted to slowly rise in the amou...
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...ile country B is estimated to decrese by roughly 10% . The amount of industry job...
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... is estimated to decrese by roughly 10% . The amount of industry job in country B...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, regarding, third, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 935.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 198.0 196.424390244 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72222222222 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85864949473 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494949494949 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 279.9 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.2471812794 43.030603864 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.571428571 112.824112599 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2857142857 22.9334400587 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.23603664747 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 1.69756097561 1060% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319270605926 0.215688989381 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169205641585 0.103423049105 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804934716755 0.0843802449381 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224713736631 0.15604864568 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069183902282 0.0819641961636 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 43, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e bar chart compares different countries in terms of their employment rate among...
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Line 1, column 53, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...t compares different countries in terms of their employment rate among agricultu...
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Line 3, column 53, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... minority of job in agriculture is found in country A and C while country B ma...
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Line 3, column 73, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...agriculture is found in country A and C while country B makes up the highest...
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...ture is found in country A and C while country B makes up the highest figure...
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...nd in country A and C while country B makes up the highest figure in agricul...
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...country A and C while country B makes up the highest figure in agriculture . ...
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...try A and C while country B makes up the highest figure in agriculture . The ...
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...s up the highest figure in agriculture . The amount of job in services in all c...
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Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...iculture . The amount of job in services in all countries increase In 1980, a...
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Line 3, column 196, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...b in services in all countries increase In 1980, about two-thirds of agricultur...
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Line 5, column 26, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...s increase In 1980, about two-thirds of agriculture employment were from cou...
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Line 5, column 58, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...o-thirds of agriculture employment were from country B. Nearly 40% of industry ...
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Line 5, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ment were from country B. Nearly 40% of industry job went to country C whereas t...
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...hat of country B In 2020, all countries are predicted to slowly rise in the amou...
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... in the amount of employment in services . By 2020, the propotion of agriculture j...
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Line 6, column 270, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ile country B is estimated to decrese by roughly 10% . The amount of industry job...
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Line 6, column 283, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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... is estimated to decrese by roughly 10% . The amount of industry job in country B...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, regarding, third, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 935.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 198.0 196.424390244 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72222222222 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85864949473 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494949494949 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 279.9 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.2471812794 43.030603864 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.571428571 112.824112599 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2857142857 22.9334400587 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.23603664747 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 1.69756097561 1060% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319270605926 0.215688989381 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169205641585 0.103423049105 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804934716755 0.0843802449381 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224713736631 0.15604864568 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069183902282 0.0819641961636 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.