The bar graphs show the distribution of employment among agriculture manufacturing industry and services in 3 countries in 1980 and 2020

Essay topics:

The bar graphs show the distribution of employment among agriculture,
manufacturing industry and services in 3 countries in 1980 and 2020

The diagram illustrates how employment was distributed among there different sectors: agriculture, services, industries in three countries in 1980 and one possible prediction in 2020.

Overall, in country A and C, most people work in the service sector whereas most of employees in country B were employed in agriculture area. Another fancy feature is that the same trend will be register in 2020.

As can be seen in the bar graph in 1980,while around three fourths of the workforce in country B were employed to work in agriculture sector, the distribution of this area in country A and country are much lower with 20% and roughly 5% respectively. The contrast of country B with country A and country C can also be registered in services sector since country B has about 30% for services whereas this distribution sector in country C is above 60% and nearly 48% in country A. In terms of industry, both country A and B shared a similar employment rate at 20%, which was far lower than that of country C, with roughly 40%.

It is projected that by 2020 the employment in all three nations will have seen a slight upward trend. In contrast, the data for agriculture in country A and C will plateau while in country B, there will be a gentle drop with 60% of the total employment by this sector. Finally, the industry sector in country A and C is forecast to lose a small portion of its employees, but the reverse is true for country B with a sharp rise to 40%.

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Average: 8.7 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 77, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the employees') or simply say ''most employees''.
Suggestion: most of the employees; most employees
...ople work in the service sector whereas most of employees in country B were employed in agricultu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so, whereas, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 1.00243902439 599% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1207.0 965.302439024 125% => OK
No of words: 262.0 196.424390244 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60687022901 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73409550806 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 106.607317073 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 351.0 283.868780488 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.7498171549 43.030603864 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.111111111 112.824112599 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1111111111 22.9334400587 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.23603664747 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370930663118 0.215688989381 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161937259941 0.103423049105 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825141003077 0.0843802449381 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237478719179 0.15604864568 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543108974644 0.0819641961636 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.2329268293 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.42 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.05 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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