Changes of the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005

Essay topics:

Changes of the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005

As can be seen from the map, the seaside resort of Templeton experienced significant change from 1990 to 2005.

In 1990, the resort was a quite and undeveloped placewith a large number of trees and individual houses, but during the next 15 years the resort was developed dramatically.

Firstly, the biggest change is that all of the invidiual houses in the south-west of the seaside were demolished, with all the trees chopped down and replaced by a supermaket and apartnents. Moreover,a new residental with apartments and the dwellings were built around the lake and supermarket. Only a few trees were remained. Furthermore, all of the trees east of the resort was cleared to made way for an airportand some houses, which sprang up around the school and hospital. The woodland and some houses in the south-east of the seaside was replaced by a factory. In addition, a new stretch of the railway along the shore running from east to west. Another, a ferry was also established to transport vehicles.

Overall, there was a complete transformation of this area, the seaside resort of Templeton-from rural village to a mainly urban landscape.

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Please help me edit the essay, I'm not sure about the relative clause, as well as the use of words. Thank you very much [/i]

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 59, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...t was a quite and undeveloped placewith a large number of trees and individual houses, but during...
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Line 5, column 37, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... Firstly, the biggest change is that all of the invidiual houses in the south-west of t...
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Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , a
...by a supermaket and apartnents. Moreover,a new residental with apartments and the ...
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Line 5, column 341, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...a few trees were remained. Furthermore, all of the trees east of the resort was cleared to...
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Line 11, column 32, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, in addition, sort of, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1069.0 965.302439024 111% => OK
No of words: 216.0 196.424390244 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94907407407 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84356886963 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 106.607317073 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592592592593 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 323.1 283.868780488 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.7836988046 43.030603864 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0833333333 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.23603664747 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256319015684 0.215688989381 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078039282193 0.103423049105 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117956466773 0.0843802449381 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161592506318 0.15604864568 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141570482277 0.0819641961636 173% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 40.7170731707 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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