The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the frequency of American people went to fast food restaurants in 2003, 2006, and 2013. Overall, a considerable amount of the USA residents ate fast food once a week in 2003 and 2006, while more people went to fast food restaurants one or two times every month in 2013.
First of all, in 2003, 4% of the individuals ate fast food every day. This ratio jumped to its four times at 16% in the next group and then peaking at 30%. After experiencing a gradual decrease, the figure dramatically fell to the final statistic of 5% in those never eating fast food. Similarly, this trend also can be viewed in 2006 but in a more significant way. The percentage firstly started at 3% before soaring to 20% in the next group. After levelling off at 32%, it steadily dropped to 4% in the end.
As for the year of 2013, a same initial proportion was recorded as that in 2006. Therefore, it sustainably climbed to the highest point at 32% in the group of eating junk food once or twice a month. The last two groups also shared the same rates with that in 2006, constituting 15% and 4% respectively.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. It is not clear to say 'in the next group' or 'The last two groups'. need to make them clear.
2. the summary is not only for the peak ones, it is for overall, better like this:
Overall, throughout the surveyed period, most Americans ate fast food moderately, while the percentage of people never ate or ate on daily basis remained low.
3. for this topic, better to compare by categories, not by years. when it is by years, it is hard to figure out what is the 'main features'. but by category, it is easier to figure out:
'every day' and 'never' share the same pattern.
'once a week' and 'several times a week' share the same pattern.
in 2013, people eat less fast food, the top one is 'once or twice a month',
and in 2006 and 2013, it has the same pattern for 'a few times a year' .
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 204 200
No. of Characters: 871 1000
No. of Different Words: 115 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.779 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.27 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.578 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 44 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 33 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 23 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.545 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.63 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.375 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.555 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, similarly, so, then, therefore, while, as for, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 911.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 204.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46568627451 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57645025658 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 106.607317073 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 265.5 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.5431690411 43.030603864 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8181818182 112.824112599 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5454545455 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.18181818182 5.23603664747 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183940605076 0.215688989381 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708329790009 0.103423049105 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0947461487863 0.0843802449381 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132473458257 0.15604864568 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115380726956 0.0819641961636 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.2329268293 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 61.2550243902 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 11.4140731707 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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